dVerse — quadrille 110 — real good for free

Busking by Clarinet Photograph by John Haldane
Busking by Clarinet is a photograph by John Haldane

 

Real good for free

slipping out of k-count silk
into carrie bradshaw blahniks,
now clicking down fifth avenue.
there — a busker bum with
a clarinet. now jaywalking, she
stands near enough to smell
the cooking high notes.
stunned, brimming with props,
lunch at the carlton can wait

 

 

My title and poem are tributes to Joni Mitchell’s song, “Real Good for Free.”  Miles of Aisles was recorded live at Pine Knob Music Theater in the village of Clarkston, Michigan.

 

Whimsy Gizmo (De Jackson) is today’s host at dVerse.  De says:
Get off your bum and brandish us a poem of exactly 44 words (not including the title), and be sure to blast in some form of the word bum. Bum-rush a rhyme. Go wild with hyphens. Have fun with sound bump. Just be sure to buzz us your best bum poem, and share it here!

 

54 Comments Add yours

  1. whimsygizmo says:

    Oh, Lisa! I can hear and see this so clearly! So well described.

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  2. I love how you can see those performers and watch them for free… but did you ever see what happened when Joshua Bell performed in rush hour at a Washington train station…?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      No but am guessing a mob scene? I’ve seen U2 busking in the NYC subway and Eddie Vedder busking outside of the baseball stadium in Chicago (on youtubes of course.)

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      1. Nobody stopped to listen… they all let him stand there playing on his priceless Stradivarius

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        1. msjadeli says:

          That is really surprising! Not one person stopped 😦 I know the worker bees were focused on their destinations, but still!

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          1. I have heard him live once… and he is an amazing violinist

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            1. msjadeli says:

              Awesome! I bet it sounds all the better in a concert hall with the special acoustics.

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              1. Truedessa says:

                I used to see street musicians and some were very good. I always left a few bucks. You have given this character life.

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                1. msjadeli says:

                  Thank you, Truedessa.

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  3. Lucy says:

    Very beautifully written! Loved these lines the most:

    “into carrie bradshaw blahniks,
    now clicking down fifth avenue.
    there — a busker bum with
    a clarinet.”

    So vivid and utterly descriptive!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Lucy. Joni Mitchell always inspires me 🙂

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  4. rivrvlogr says:

    Well that was just a little bit jazzy!

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  5. kim881 says:

    One of my most favourite Joni songs, Lisa. I used to sing it when I still had a voice, before adult onset asthma, and I used it as a creative writing prompt when I was teaching. I love the rhythm of the phrase ‘now clicking down fifth avenue’ and the idea that a busker bum with a clarinet can come between a woman in Blahniks and lunch at the Carlton!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I knew you would like this, Kim and pleased to hear you used to sing it and used it as a creative writing prompt. I bet you got some good responses and I hope your students took away the lesson you were teaching them with it. Thanks for the comment.

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      1. kim881 says:

        I kept a lot of them, but had to throw them away. I might still have some saved on a USB stick.

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  6. sanaarizvi says:

    This has such a natural flow and rhythm to it, Lisa 😀 I love; “a busker bum with
    a clarinet. now jaywalking, she stands near enough to smell the cooking high notes.”

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Glad you like it, Sanaa, thank you.

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  7. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    Joni and Leonard Cohen are constant Muses for me. When I lived in CA, I drove home (WA state) several times a year, cruising at 90 on I-5, in my Impala super sport convertible with the top down, with Joni and the Beatles blasting from my speakers.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      That makes for a nice visual, Glenn. I bet you were wearing some really cool sunglasses also 🙂

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  8. gillena says:

    Lovely poem a vivid scene. Luv the music too
    Thanks for dropping by to read mine

    (✿◠‿◠)
    much love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Gillena and you are welcome ❤

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  9. Ron. says:

    This major Joni fan thanks you deeply for the reminder of her lyric, and even more deeply for this splendid stepchild. Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ron, thank you very much. Glad to know you are a Joni fan and that enjoyed the poem.

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  10. Beverly Crawford says:

    Aha the charming busker bum stopped her short in her Mannolos! Love this.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Beverly 🙂

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  11. hank77 says:

    kaykuala
    Good music often but people are busy and many don’t stop, missing it all

    Hank

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes they are and yes they do, Hank.

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  12. You had me Carrie Bradshaw Blahniks. Nicely done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Arcadia.

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  13. Sadje says:

    Love the visuals you’ve built up

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        Always a pleasure

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  14. robtkistner says:

    Nice write Lisa, loved it!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Rob!

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  15. the rhymes and then the cooking notes sound super good to me!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much.

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      1. you’re welcome. 🙂

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  16. calmkate says:

    vivid images that summarise Joni’s song nicely … really lovely!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Kate!

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  17. Liked this a lot – all the senses going. I particularly liked “she / stands near enough to smell / the cooking…” line just took me there.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks and glad you liked it, Peter. BTW, I’ve watched all episodes of Detectorists — and loved the show, thank you for making me aware of it.

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  18. Chris Hall says:

    Very vivid! Nice one, Li 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks Chris!

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  19. I haven’t got a clue what most of those words mean, but they have a really beaty beat, like high heels clicking down the street.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Jane.

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  20. rothpoetry says:

    Very nicely done Lisa. I like the rhyming lines and they way music can grab you and pull you in!
    Dwight

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you enjoyed it, thanks, Dwight.

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  21. lifelessons says:

    I don’t think I’ve ever heard this song before, Lisa. Or if I did, I never really listened to the words.The music is nice, but I like your words better… J

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad to have introduced it to you, Judy 🙂

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  22. Dave says:

    Well done! Good wordplay.
    A few years back would have had no idea what “Carrie Bradshaw blahniks are” but my sweetie loves ‘Sex & the City’ so now I do. Not a favorite show of mine but I was able to work references to it into my novel, since the protagonist is a 30-something woman set when the series was running.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      aha! I used to love watching the show. This was in the day where one had to wait a week for each new episode. Now we can binge watch series over a weekend. Glad you enjoyed the poem, Dave 🙂

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