dVerse — Quadrille 130 — Smudged

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It was this time of year, when evenings warm and
tadpoles crawl ashore, when your green eyes,
unholy lit, tethered me. Searing me everywhere
your touch lingered, grinning,
your gaze never left mine.
You wanted everything then,
as you smudged me in your filth.

 

image:  “Skin on Skin Love and Burning Passion,” by CORinAZONe

Mish is today’s host for dVerse’ Quadrille.  Mish says:
We are writing poems of exactly 44 words, excluding the title BUT it must include a given word. Today, I give you the word …..smudge

55 Comments Add yours

  1. Ingrid says:

    I love how you went from the idea of sultry passionate nights of love to the filth of the swamp. Such passions are perilous!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ingrid. It’s just like that, being gently led into a swamp you can’t find your way out of.

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  2. Oooh! An unexpected twist there – gave me a jolt – such energy!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sarah, glad it had its intended effect. Thank you for reading and your comment.

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  3. It sounded so wonderful and passionate at first until we see how it went worse in that last line…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Bjorn, it was…

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  4. That last line hit me in a visceral way.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and letting me know.

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  5. Mish says:

    Very engaging….and an unexpected sharp turn at the end. Nice!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Mish!

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  6. Yes! I love where you took this prompt. Was not expecting that last line, Jade/Li. Well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Susan thank you. After reading some of your poetry, I know you can relate to this one.

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  7. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    “When your green eyes, unholy lit, tethered me”–grand word-smithing. You sucker-punched us with your close; loved it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glenn, thank you! Happy to have pleased you with it. ❤

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  8. Grace says:

    I agree the ending was a twist in the poem – what a way to be smudged in filth.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Grace. Yes.

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  9. Bodhirose says:

    Maybe those “green eyes, unholy lit…” were a clue as to what was to come in that last line! I always love a surprise ending…very nice.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Bodhirose, yes that was a clue! Thanks for reading and for your comment.

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  10. I love a good poetic gut-punch of a line and you did it with that twist of an ending. So well-written

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much!

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  11. rothpoetry says:

    Passion and cravings do strange things to our psyche! A great poem and an interesting painting to go with it! They fit together very well!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dwight, thank you for your thoughtful comment.

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  12. Sadje says:

    Wonderfully written Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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  13. kaykuala h says:

    You wanted everything then,
    as you smudged me in your filth.

    A brilliant way of saying something positive Jade, by employing a negative stance throughout. Your man will see the reflected humour in it and love you for this! Lovely Ma’am!

    Hank

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for a different perspective on the poem, Hank. It’s always interesting to see what others see in the words.

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  14. That ending did surprise! Sounds like a predator, and a seductive one at that!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Someone who knew exactly what they were doing!

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  15. robtkistner says:

    Must admit, I’ve been smudged, and I have also done the smudging. Strong poem Lisa! 👍

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ditto! Thank you, Rob!

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  16. M says:

    whew. that is some turn in the final line ~

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    1. msjadeli says:

      In retrospect it was quite a shock to the system. Thank you for reading and your comment, M.

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  17. the tadpole the filth the passion. this is weaved with such eloquence, Ms. Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Rosemarie.

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  18. Dale says:

    Sensual and delicious and … unless you are a fellow frog or ogre, being led to the swamp is not a good thing 🙂
    Beautifully written, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks much, Dale!

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      1. Dale says:

        Pleasure, Lisa!

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  19. memadtwo says:

    You really know how to conjure an ominous tension. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kerfe.

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  20. you know, when I read the word “grinning” my inner voice said, “uh-oh…”


    David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and your comment, David.

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  21. writingwhatnots says:

    What a line – ‘as you smudged me in your filth’. Wasn’t expecting that!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and commenting, Marion.

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  22. Well done luring us in and then giving us the twist. Your environmental metaphor is well fitting.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, TJS!

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  23. Truedessa says:

    Sometimes one doesn’t know what they are in until it’s to late, great how you surprised your readers with the twist.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Truedessa, thank you. Exactly so.

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  24. ghostmmnc says:

    oooh Good one! Shows how something can start out so beautiful, and before you know it, it descends into horror. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you. Yes, Barbara, for sure!

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  25. Helen Dehner says:

    I sank into the swampy sludge … great write, Lisa. Thanks for visiting my Quadrille post.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, thank you, and you are very welcome 🙂 ❤

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  26. Wow! Steamy little piece of writing.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sara 🙂 I gotta burst out with it from time to time.

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