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It is very hard to write this way, beginning things backward…
–The Torrents of Spring (1926)

resized sunset alone

Standing at the edge of the water,
alone, at sunset, remembering the
innumerable times you begged me
with a happy, hopeful smile
to come to watch them with you
and I declined. And all the rest too.

There is no other part to this story
that is worth telling.

Trapped in flesh-suffocating regret,
a tar I flail to escape that snaps
me back to inert suffering yet again.
Held still as survival receptors
mock. Superstitious holiday where
shadows of clear never go away.

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I am today’s host of dVerse’ Poetics.  I say:
Your challenge today, should you choose to accept it, is to pick ONE of Hemingway’s quotes to be inspired by and write a poem.

 

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  1. Oh… if you start with the end, you can only work your way backward through the regrets…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      😦 yes, ad infinitum…

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  2. Grace says:

    This is a very difficult situation: Trapped in flesh-suffocating regret.

    How does one get out of the cycle? Thanks for hosting!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your comment. I can imagine a giant golden eagle lifting me out of the mire to a warm salty sea where the residue can be washed away…

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  3. The problem with regret is that it ties one to moments in the past, preventing one from seeing the potential before them

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Uh-huh, like sticky tar 😦

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  4. sanaarizvi says:

    “Trapped in flesh-suffocating regret, a tar I flail to escape that snaps,” .. this is incredibly potent! It can be very difficult to make your way out of this cycle.. it has the ability to consume people. Thank you so much for the glorious prompt, Lisa 💝💝

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sanaa, thank you for your thoughtful comment and you are very welcome for the prompt ❤

      Liked by 1 person

  5. Ingrid says:

    This sounds like the end result of profound loss. Heartbreaking and raw!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ingrid thank you for your empathy for the person in the poem ❤

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      1. Ingrid says:

        Impossible not to feel it!

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  6. Lucy says:

    Truly heartbreaking and poignant.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Lucy.

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    2. coalblack says:

      Is it just me, or was this poem done after the couplet? In any event, I loved it. And I love the topic you chose. Btw, “Torrents” is one that I have not yet read, but it is on my list. Thanks again for the excellent prompt.

      –Shay

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      1. msjadeli says:

        Thank you, Shay, I’m not sure what the question is? I’ve only read one of his books so far, but after watching the series the plan is to read more. You’re very welcome on the prompt and I’m glad it worked out to you visiting dVerse pub. Hope to see you here again 🙂

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        1. coalblack says:

          I meant that your first 8 lines make a fine poem by themselves.

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          1. msjadeli says:

            Ah! OK 🙂 Thank you.

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  7. Carol anne says:

    brilliant piece! Loved it! ❤

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Carol anne!

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  8. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    Who ever thought that poetics created bassackwards could convey such emotion? The couplet is jarring, reinforcing the loss or dimming of parameters, the loss of linear perception; nice job.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you so much for your feedback, Glenn, that is a good way of putting it, loss of parameters and linear perception, now it’s just a state of being 😦

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  9. jazzytower says:

    “flesh-suffocating regret”.. That’s a hard one to ease out of. All a part of life my dear. Well put.

    Pat

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Pat.

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  10. Ron. says:

    Tar-iffic work! And thanks for the cool prompt, Lisa. I had a tough time getting going, but I’m hoping…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ron. I just read yours and really liked the Hemingway-ness of it.

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  11. Sadje says:

    Beautiful poetry Li. The regret just oozes out.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome ☺️

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  12. Carrie V. H. says:

    Such a wonderful prompt! Your poem grips the heart. We all hold regrets of one kind or another. Lovely writing Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Carrie, thank you very much ❤

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  13. rothpoetry says:

    Very nicely done Lisa. Regrets do come with starting backwards.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dwight.

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  14. Ali Grimshaw says:

    LIsa,
    Thanks for hosting and for the prompt. I especially like how you inserted these lines between your two stanzas. Perfectly done.
    “There is no other part to this story
    that is worth telling.”

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ali, thank you. Like Shay mentioned, I could have (should have?) stopped there. I didn’t want to go into the rationalizations as much as the state of being that has resulted.

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  15. I can feel that tar of regret, and that “snap” back to suffering as resistance just makes it worse. Enjoying all the wonderful creations inspired by your prompt tonight! 💗

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Tricia. It’s not easy to shake off. I’m likewise enjoying all of the poems! Papa would be very pleased ❤

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  16. calmkate says:

    powerful rendition of grief and regret, the danger of looking back … you’ve expressed it so effectively!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Indeed, Kate! Thank you.

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  17. memadtwo says:

    It’s hard to get past those deep regrets. They always haunt. Wonderful illustration too.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes it is. Thanks, K.

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  18. Helen Dehner says:

    No other part worth telling … incredibly sad, Lisa. I have felt that sadness you so beautifully captured.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Helen. I appreciate your caring and sorry you can relate to the feeling 😦

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  19. The nice thing is that the sun also rises on another day, again and again and again. We can’t go back, but there’s always today. There will always be a sunrise and a sunset to look forward to.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      The title of my poem means something. It is when the sun is out that the groundhog’s shadow is seen, meaning 6 more weeks of winter (think of metaphors for winter.) Also in the movie of the same name, the day plays itself over and over. This kind of haunting is worst on beautiful days (beautiful sunsets.)

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      1. I read the title, I didn’t place it with the movie, I just took it as regrets that keep cycling back over and over.

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  20. markwindham says:

    regret…possibly the heaviest of emotions

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It ranks right up there.

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  21. you captured the cycle of regret and the imprisoning feeling of it. i love how this cascaded also opening with melancholia of sunset and solitude.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rosemarie, thank you for your feedback. Much appreciated.

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  22. Regret is one of the hardest emotions to conquer. This phrase opens the door: “Trapped in flesh-suffocating regret,
    a tar I flail to escape that snaps me back to inert suffering yet again…” The emotions shared in this piece are so powerful. Knocks the wind out of you!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Colleen, thank you for your heartfelt comment.

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  23. Sunra Rainz says:

    A beautiful powerful poem, msjadeli.

    “There is no other part to this story
    that is worth telling.”

    And yet it is more than enough, poignant, relatable, vivid. ❤

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you so much, Sunra!

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  24. M says:

    the 2nd stanza esp., but all of it well crafted. a darker shade of melancholy one might not ever find ~

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    1. msjadeli says:

      M, what’s that quote about staring into the abyss? It’s not a place I like to stare into for long.

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      1. M says:

        It stares back. Yep, agreed

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  25. mark author says:

    Such a goodness poem, it’s hard to get past those deep regret

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      1. mark author says:

        Okay dear 😊
        How are you doing over there

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Do I know you?

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          1. mark author says:

            Yeah
            Am author from California
            What about you

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            1. msjadeli says:

              I don’t think I do know you.

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            2. msjadeli says:

              I do not know you.

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