#FF — Commerce

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PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll

The nondescript warehouses between the tracks and the hills had become a landscape feature over time. The county books listed it as abandoned; yet every year, like clockwork, the property taxes were paid.

Engineers on trains passing through at night saw flickering lights and sometimes caught what sounded like howls on the wind but figured it was coyotes.

Warehouse activity chugged to life around midnight and kept on until just before sunrise. Illegals, runaways, and the careless waited, strapped to gurneys. Those with money paid well for organs on the other side of the border. The tunnel made transport easy.

[100 words]

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the illuminating host of Friday Fictioneers.

61 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    A ghastly trade. A stain on the characters of those of us who look away

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Agreed, Neil, along the same line as human trafficking and poaching, lowest of the low.

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  2. forestbather says:

    Very well-written indeed.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, forestbather.

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  3. Sadje says:

    Gruesome story

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes it is, thanks for reading, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome ☺️

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  4. It could be set here! A well told horrifying tale, Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I had the US-Mexican border in mind but it could be set just about at any border, you’re right, Punam. Thank you.

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  5. elmowrites says:

    *Shudder* What a story, I fear not entirely fantasy though.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and I fear I agree with you, Elmo.

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  6. jenne49 says:

    You lulled me into that one. I knew something was amiss, but was not expecting that horror. The understated way you portray it makes it even more horrific.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Flying under the radar is how this evil is perpetuated. Thank you very much for reading and your comment, Jenne.

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  7. Dale says:

    Oh my. How gruesome this turned out to be!!
    Well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Dale.

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  8. All very true. The real history of America lies in its railbeds.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Josh. So much to learn about them.

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  9. Sandra says:

    OMG I wasn’t expecting that. Something horrific yes, but not that… Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Sandra!

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  10. memadtwo says:

    That’s chilling. But people are often desperate. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      😦 I’d like to catch them and those who pay them and put them out of commission.

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      1. memadtwo says:

        Every day I wonder what makes humans do such horrible things.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          I think we can guess pretty well on this one 😦

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  11. A wonderfully mysterious and sinister tale. Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Mason!

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  12. Dear Lisa,

    A chilling story well told. I hate to think this actually happens but I know it does.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, thank you. I have to shake my head in sorrow at what humans do to each other.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  13. plaridel says:

    it’s too real it’s scary

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Plaridel. I wish it wasn’t based on truth 😦

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  14. michael1148humphris says:

    A story that took a twist I did not expect.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      haha! Glad to have surprised you, Michael.

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  15. draliman says:

    All those people passing close by with no clue of the ghastly trade going on.

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  16. A grim tale indeed. If only it was pure fiction. Well done Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Keith.

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  17. pennygadd51 says:

    A grimly good tale. You’ve told the story very tautly, picking out crucial details “landscape detail” and “strapped to gurneys” are particularly telling.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Penny, thank you very much for your feedback. It is appreciated! 🙂

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  18. oneta hayes says:

    Oh, how dreadful that this is too true, but fortunately, rare. The newsworthy. You did a great job with this picture prompt.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Oneta, it may not be as rare as you think it is:
      https://humantraffickingsearch.org/organ-trafficking-around-the-world/

      Thank you very much for reading and commenting.

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      1. oneta hayes says:

        I didn’t mean human trafficking was rare. I believe it is a plague on us! I meant the row of warehouses used as cover. Victims of this horror are kept in isolation as long as the results of abuses are visible. I fear the perks that are visible are an allurement to young ladies who fail to see the misery side of the “sex” industry. The run-away who end up on the streets.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Thanks for saying more about it, Oneta. It helps me understand where you’re coming from on it. I agree that on the surface it might look glamorous or not that bad to a runaway. Kids on the streets scare the heck out of me.

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  19. notestowomen says:

    A horrific tale well told. Human trafficking is an evil which needs to be eradicated.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you. Yes, it does! There are so many institutions and policies that make trafficking easy to do. Once trafficking victims are “off the radar” anything can happen to them 😦

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  20. notestowomen says:

    Hopefully, more awareness will lead to policies which will make trafficking more difficult for it to thrive until it is abolished. Keep writing these stories and raising awareness, Lisa.

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  21. granonine says:

    Oh! Horrors! Literally. Really well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Linda!

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  22. Nobbinmaug says:

    Ew! Immigrant organs. I prefer good ol’ ‘Murican made organs.

    It was coyotes just not that kind of coyotes. This is the kind of horror story that gets me, the kind that happens to real people. It’s hard to believe this shady underworld exists. It’s something we hear about, but most of us never see, fortunately.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for the thoughtful comment.

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  23. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    I have read where dates wake up after a mickey and be without a kidney or whatever.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      So gruesome! I think it happens more than we want to know 😦

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  24. The slow start, the descriptions that followed made it clear that somethimg eerie was happening. Still, the last lines took my breath away! Very ominois. I fear not it is real, though. What a well etched story.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Neel thank you for reading and your feedback on the story. I appreciate your comment very much.

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  25. GHLearner says:

    Very well told and makes me sick to my stomach to know that this really happens all over the world.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      It really is a jungle out there, more and more. Thank you, Gah.

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  26. Bill says:

    Yikes! You got me. Cleverly done.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Bill!

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