Grace is today’s host for dVerse’ Meeting the Bar. Grace says:
Today’s challenge: To write a poem in monotetra form. You choose your theme, following the stanza structure as described.
Glenn was kind enough to point out that I didn’t follow directions very well by not having every line of every stanza rhyming the same rhyme. I just read Kerfe’s poem and comment and realized what Glenn was saying (at first I thought it was the near-rhymes within the stanza he was talking about.) I have edited the poem with the correct parameters of the form:
The locust tree is thinner now
To keep the tree, I made a vow
to trim away from dwelling; though
looks scrawny, wow; looks scrawny, wow!
When ere to pear sun not allowed
now sharing sunbeams all about.
Before her reaches screeched aloud;
now regal as she wears her crown.
A bigger sky around the house
When I look up I see the clouds
instead of just her many boughs
she smiles not scowls, I smile, not scowl.
Tao Talk 
A leaner and trimmer version! Reads well.
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Thank you, Sadje. It reads better than before for sure.
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You’re welcome Li
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I love this, it’s quite beautiful. The ending put a smile on my face too. I enjoyed both versions, though. :D
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Thank you, Lucy, and glad you smiled :)
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a cute tribute to your thriving garden Lisa, well done!
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Thank you, Kate :)
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my pleasure Lisa :)
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Fun!
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I like the near rhymes, and the subtle subversion of the form in the final line.
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Max, one of my blogmates, mentioned both the tree and I were happy, hence that subversion :)
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I absolutely love, love, love this! :D Gorgeously rendered, Lisa 💝💝
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Thanks, Sanaa :)
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Love the last verse
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:) Thank you
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this is a great poem Li! So cool :-)
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Thank you, Carol Anne!
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