Ingrid is today’s host for dVerse’ Poetics. Ingrid says:
Begin to compose a poem without putting pen to paper: you can say the words in your head, or repeat them out loud. Record them, if you wish, as an aid to memory. Try to complete the poem as far as possible without writing it down. Think about the devices discussed above: regular rhythms, repeated phrases or ‘motifs’, alliteration and rhyme schemes – anything to aid the memory and help the words to flow.
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Oh I love it… I had to go to another room as I couldn’t read it and had to listen. Love the cat in the background and the sound of the thunder and the rhymes…
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LOL thanks, Bjorn. Of course Mlady had to walk up and start meowing as I recorded it. That’s what cats do. Glad you enjoyed my story! ❤
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This is an excellent example of oral poetry Lisa! I was really enchanted by your tale, from the ‘menaced refrain of cicadas’ to the characterful voice of the Brown Man, all those wonderful sounds and adjectives such as ‘dry-gulch-parched!’ I also like that you didn’t write it down, so I had to listen and not rely on the words. And of course, I loved the miaows!
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Thank you very much for your feedback, Ingrid, glad you liked it.
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Oh, this is wonderful, Lisa! This is definitely a story-poem to listen to. I love all the sounds and your reading that brings it all alive.
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Merril, thank you. As I read it it reminded me of when I used to read to my kids 🙂
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Oh, I bet they loved it! I remember doing silly voices for mine and adding funny asides. 😀
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This is absolutely wonderful, Lisa! Great to hear your voice. It definitely brought this story to life!
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Thanks much, Dale, glad you enjoyed the story 🙂 ❤
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Very much so 🙂
I don’t yet have the balls to read anything of mine!
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LOL on the balls. How about a dare? I dare you to read one of your poems or stories! I’ll write you a poem on the subject of your choice if you!
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Haha! We shall see…
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🙂
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I enjoyed your story, msjadeli! Made me think of Greek gods. Lovely alliteration and great reading 🙂 I love the cat miaowing in the middle as if in agreement, so funny! 😀
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Thank you very much, Sunra and Mlady knew her help was needed 🙂
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Lisa,
That mud and rain and cabbage soup could make me smile and feel so good, who knew? Delightfully told tale!
pax,
dora
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Dora the story told itself and I just passed it on. I’m happy it brought a smile to your face ❤
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Love me some Rainmaker tales. Brown Man, Rain Man, do your dance for me. Maybe you can bitch slap this drought, we’ll have to see. Excellent oral rendering. You read well. Wish you would do it on OLN Live some time.
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That was really good! I loved hearing you read your poem. 🙂
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Thank you and glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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Most impressive Lisa, your tale awesome, your reading gripping … you took me there, kudos!
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Thanks, Kate!
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my pleasure Lisa!
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Wow, Lisa, that was cool! I also enjoyed your cat!😀 At first, I was wondering whether I was imagining her!😆
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Thank you, Christian! She was my backup vocalist 😉
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All the details drew me in, a very atmospheric read, feel as if I was there in every scene! Your narration was perfect!
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Thank you very much, Tricia, so happy you enjoyed the reading ❤
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The stresses, the intonations, the story itself. Bravo
amazing!!
I have tried to upload poems to Sound cloud but i don t understand how to.
much❤love
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Thank you, Gillena!
Have you recorded them on your computer first? Have you created an account?
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Loved it!! Fantastic imagery, could totally picture it as you recited it.
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Heather, thank you, I wanted to make it vivid.
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You’re welcome, you definitely accomplished that!
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This is exquisitely drawn, Lisa! I so enjoyed the tone and pacing.. atmospheric and lovely to listen to! 💝💝
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Thanks much, Sanaa. So glad you enjoyed it. I tried to keep control of the pacing while reading while keeping the story going.
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That was a beautiful story and so well read! I loved it. Now that is one that could be told for generations! A great fairytale! You could make a great children’s story out of this one!!
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Thanks, Dwight. I’d like to try and memorize it.
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That would be a great story for the grands…
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What great storytelling, Lisa. Vivid and epic.
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Thank you, K 🙂
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You’ve aced this one. Well done.
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Thank you, Misky.
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So well read, Li! Reminded me of my teacher in school who would bring alive poems with her recitation! Excellent writing and superlative rendering. ❤️
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Thank you, Punam. My mom read to me this way, and we had reading time in 5th grade with a teacher who read like this. I followed the tradition with my kids. Glad you enjoyed the offering ❤
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How wonderful! My absolute pleasure. ❤️
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You really got into story-teller mode with this one!
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Thanks, Jane. I also thank the little brown man for letting me share his story.
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Of course 🙂
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Lisa, your reading is wonderful .. in cadence, tone, emotion. Cabbage soup, drinking fill, danced, the seeds, the RUMBLE, GRUMBLE … I am typing as i write as you can tell … waving arms, clenching fists, rain on heads … CORNED BEEF IN SOUP .. Oh My!
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❤ Delighted by your comment, Helen. I guessed you would like this one 🙂 Thanks much.
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wow, that sounded great, an epic tale, you had a lot of great storytelling, and you animated with your voice so well. really enjoyed this
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Many thanks and glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Did you… did you… record that in one go, Lisa?
❤
David
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Yes, I did. It wasn’t the first take though. It took maybe 3 tries. That’s why I kept going when Mlady started meowing lol
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p.s. I tried it once with music playing in the background but I got so distracted it was terrible
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Your vocal Inflection awakened and drew my focus on every syllable. So beautiful Lisa!
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Mary, thank you for your lovely comment and very pleased you connected with Rain Man 🙂 ❤
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You are welcome
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I loved sitting here and listening to you read the story. Since you offered no text, I allowed my ears to absorb the story to the full. It took me back, not only to when I used to read to my children and students, but also when my mother would read to me.
One of the parts I appreciate most from your story is the generosity of the people to let the Rain Man and his horse drink their fill, when they had so little water for themselves.
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Abigail, thank you for your lovely comment. I’m glad you took a close look at it and enjoyed the experience.
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This is beautiful Lisa. I could imagine you reading it to a class of young children, their little mouths wide open as they hung in to every word. I particularly loved that he ‘squeezed the clouds’ ☺️💕
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Thanks, Christine!
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Beautiful post
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Thank you!
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Great story. Enjoyed the reading.
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Thank you, Sean, happy you liked hearing it.
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Awesome Lisa…it’s nice hearing you read it! You have a good reading voice.
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Thank you very much, Max. I really enjoyed putting this one together.
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It’s a cool idea…you can inflect on certain words…if that is the right word….to emphasize something more than the written word.
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