Hey Diddle Diddle
Your smooth thumb circles
the electric pink scar,
a constellation, one star
from silver spoons ago,
when the cow grew tusks.
We’d nibbled gingerbread,
discussing vicarious ghosts
of dishes; broken imitations.
It made me burst in dizzy.
I envisioned your autopsy.
The hatchet grazed you.
The look in your eyes now
is just like it was then.
You stand, smile, straighten,
and walk out the door.
Shay is the host of Shay’s Word Garden’s Word List.
Just use at least 3 of the 20 words provided to write a poem of any style or length, then link up, visit others, and have fun! (I see you, you couple of people who link but never visit anyone.)
autopsy
bravo
cellar
clogged
cows
discussing
dizzy
electric
funny
ghost
gingerbread
hatchet
imitation
postponed
radio
scar
tasty
tusks
vicarious
years
Lillian is today’s host for dVerse’ OLN LIVE.
So good. So cool, you. 𤩠š
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Thank you, Selma!
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I really enjoyed this!
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Thank you!
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Eek! Just say no, that’s what i say. Scenes from the violent world of Herb & Madge.
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Shay, can you help me out here: who are Herb & Madge? Guessing relatives or friends of the author?
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They are no one. Just squares I made up!
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Very interesting thoughts Li.
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Thank you, Sadje
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Youāre welcome my friend
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That’s quite a word list. You’ve created a narrative that could be expanded in any direction. Intense. (K)
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Thank you, K. I would love to see you write to one of Shay’s Word Lists. It’s a new prompt and I’ve enjoyed every list!
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I tried to find a way to follow the blog but could not. There’s no place to even put an email address.
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Can you find it with this link? It’s on blogger I think, so that might be what the holdup is?
https://fireblossom-wordgarden.blogspot.com/2022/01/word-garden-word-list-8-russell-edson.html
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I like the sense of eavesdropping on a couple here, maybe hearing bits and pieces of the conversation through the walls, and the way people can concentrate of everything and still miss what’s important.Or so I read. I love that ;last stanza, especially. (BTW, it was a little distracting having an ad for prostate supplements in the middle of this, in case you don;t see it.)
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Joy, I appreciate what you see in the poem. And thank you for the feedback on the ad. No, I can’t see it from here. What browser do you use? Another blogger and I are trying to figure out why different people are seeing the ads placed in different spots. I have it set for the bottom of the page, after the content. Maybe I’ll try a side panel ad and see what happens.
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*on* everything, not of.
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It’s Firefox on my phone. I have an ad blocker on my Firefox on the comp. so I don;t see any at all, or I could never stand to be on Facebook. š Yeah, it was smack dab in the middle of the poem, flashing at me to learn all about wonderful prostate solutions.
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Thanks for the feedback. UGH on the ad!!!!!!
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āYour smooth thumb circles
the electric pink scarā
Vivid imagery from the first line. I love every one. Whole first stanza could be clipped, and re-quoted, out of context and it have a nice ring. I often think of that very first person young starts an odd saying, like āteaching your grandmother how to suck eggsā, probably came about āsilver spoons ago, when the cow grew tusksā.
Best learn a lesson and add that second scar to the collection, and be weary of flying hatchets, in the future.
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Darius, what a delightful comment. Happy it connected with you.
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such a mysterious poem, and that last stanza in particular, a lot of directions to go with this. first i think maybe the narrator offended the guy, so he leaves. then i think maybe the narrator sees him leave and thinks he’s off to hazard some other chore, and worries for him. very cool poem, enjoyed the read
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Phillip, thank you. I’m glad it got the gears turning for you.
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That is really awesomeā¦love the wordplay
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Thank you!
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You got a lot out of him; I’ve always liked the “The Cat and the Fiddle” rhyme. One thing for him, he wears his wedding ring on his right hand. And parts his hair on the left. I love his beard, perfect for those reminiscing of the long, long ago when the cow was still alive. Ha!!
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Wonderful comment, Jim. Thank you š
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What you have done here is cool and so Edson off the wall fantastic! Wonderful writing Lisa!!
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Carrie, thank you, glad you enjoyed!
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Hauntingly magical, Lisa! I don’t know Edson’s work, but now I want to…
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Thanks, Ingrid. I missed you at the live reading. We just finished up.
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Youāre welcome, Lisa! Iām too ill with PMDD to be on camera, unfortunately š³
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Sorry to hear you’re feeling under the weather. May it pass like a winter storm. Take it easy, dear.
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Thanks Lisa š
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Oh I imagine this is not a very healthy relationship… maybe it’s a good thing he walk out the door. Whenever someone thinks of a hatchet and your autopsy you should keep your distance.
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I have to agree with you, Bjorn. Some relationships are not meant to be, no matter how much we wish they would.
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Wonderful to hear live, and again, stunning lines..
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Thank you, Ain.
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A mysterious poem, Lisa, with great imagery. I enjoyed hearing you read it today!
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Thanks, Merril. The word lists provided make for strange alchemy.
I enjoyed hearing you read your Visual Verse poem, I saw it there earlier this week and thought it was lovely. You read it well.
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You’re welcome and thank you, Lisa! š
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This is gorgeously written, Lisa! š It was wonderful to hear you read this at dVerse LIVE šš
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Sanaa, thank you so much. May I say the same about hearing you read yours as well? Your poem comes alive with your reading.
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Fine work indeed, to which your Zoomread only added more excellence, Salute!
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Thanks, Ron.
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Excellent Lisa! š
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Thank you, Rob!
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This line intrigued me, “The look in your eyes now is just like it was then.” I was thinking maybe he is a true ghost she is visiting with. The whole poem has a dreamy feel. Enjoyed! ā£ļø
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I like what you see in this, Tricia. You know, maybe he is a ghost š ā¤
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Works for me! š„°
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Wow… that is quite a list of unrelated words. You did a wonderful job, Lisa.
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Thank you, Dwight. I like what Shay does with her word lists. She takes them from just one writer’s body of work and also gives a general introduction of the style of writing of that author. It’s a potent brew for the imagination.
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Good for you!
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Brava! Wonderful response to the prompt!
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Reena, thank you very much š ā¤
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The poem as a whole was quirky.And I loved it š
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Hey, Q, glad you loved the poem. Thank you š
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So good to see you at OLN LIVE last night…and to hear you read this! Hatchet and autopsy….oh dear. Dizzy indeed!
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Lillian, thank you, and thank you for hosting last night. I believe a good time was had by all. I think hearing poetry read aloud takes it from 2 dimensions to 3 dimensions and beyond.
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