TSM 201 — Return Forever

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Existentials traversed to nethers’ wilds. Necessary lies, now I
Return
wise, a willing sacrifice
to the
excised, still rhythmed heart’s
scene of
invisible keening-rent-divine of
the crime —
your forever silent judgment:
guilty.

Today’s poem is in Waltmarie form, described as: 10 line poem, any subject, even numbered lines are 2 syllables and form their own poem when read separately. Odd lines are longer with no specific syllable count.

The title of the poem is very similar (missing a “to”) to a Chick Corea album, so in honor of that most excellent album I am including a cut from it.

top image:  Photo by Jonah Reenders

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33 Comments Add yours

  1. Carrie V. H. says:

    The Waltmarie form is one I have never seen. This is done well Lisa. You always know so many wonderful and different poetic forms. I hope you have a great weekend my friend

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Carrie, glad you enjoyed the poem. I have noticed when my emotions want to have their way with me I use forms more. Thank you very much, hoping yours is great also ❤

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  2. The Hinoeuma says:

    Are those your feetz?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      No, Vic. This is the image that we have been given this week to inspire us to write an ekphrastic poem. That said, my feet don’t look so different from these (except mine are clean lol.)

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      1. The Hinoeuma says:

        LOL! Clean feetz is GOOD! 😀

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        1. msjadeli says:

          🙂 I value my feet and try to take good care of them.

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          1. The Hinoeuma says:

            Me, too!!!🦶🦶

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  3. memadtwo says:

    Silent judgement–the worst kind. (K)

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  4. Helen Dehner says:

    You “do” this form so well … I love the whole and I love the two!!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, thank you ❤

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  5. Sadje says:

    Great take Li. There is such poignancy in your poem.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sadje, thank you ❤

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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  6. Wow, Lisa… What a flow. I could imagine somebody (not me) rapping this!

    -David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, David. You never know when it could happen…

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  7. qbit says:

    Very cool form there, and the poem seems to walk with a limp, banging down on those wonderful one-word accents.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Wonderful feedback, thank you, Q.

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  8. wyndolynne says:

    This form creates the pauses that create a reluctance around the central poem; the idea of guilt is both complicated and reinforced.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Wyndolynne, thank you for your insights here.

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  9. Truedessa says:

    Interesting form that works well with your message.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Truedessa.

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  10. Sherry Marr says:

    I am unfamiliar with this form too, but you have executed it very well.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sherry!

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  11. Dale says:

    ooh… I like this form! Gonna have to add it to my list!
    Well done, Madam!

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    1. Dale says:

      Oh! And I forgot to mention I love Return to Forever… 😉

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      1. msjadeli says:

        Yes! It’s marvelous isn’t it.

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    2. msjadeli says:

      Goody, Dale! Try to let me know when you use it. Thanks for reading and your comment.

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      1. Dale says:

        Lordy. I have a draft that lists all the ones I want to try (with examples – yours has just been entered).

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  12. Syl says:

    Didn’t know this form,
    But it’s powerful, especially because of that last word: guilty.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Syl, thank you.

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