dVerse — OLN 321 and earthweal OLW 130 — Moon Troiku inspired by Samuel Peralta

resized full moon 071322

Earth, sky, stillness.
The evening unfolds
the rorschach of the moon.

Earth, sky, stillness.
Moon shares its moment
bonding wonder.

The evening unfolds
the same, yet different
the moon won’t say why.

[T]he rorschach of the moon.
always tells
if our piano is in tune.

 

image:  full moon taken on 071322

Today’s form is a troiku, where I will use Samuel Peralta’s first face of twenty-eight from his exquisite, Twenty-Eight Faces of the Moon. In case you don’t go to the troiku link, I will be taking each line of Samuel’s original and using them to begin each of my three haiku.

Mish is today’s host of dVerse’ Open Link Night.  Thank you, Mish, for the work you put into this prompt.

Brendan is the host of earthweal’s Open Link Weekend.

 

 

46 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    Interesting take Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje!

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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  2. Paula Light says:

    So lovely. And the original is exquisite ⭐️🌙

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Paula. And yes, it is!

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  3. kittysverses says:

    Beautiful, Li. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you! ❤

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  4. kittysverses says:

    My favourite is the 2nd haiku. Exquisite, Li. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Kitty. Glad you like it.

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  5. Gillena Cox says:

    BRAVO. WELL DONE

    Much💖love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Gillena, thank you! ❤

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  6. For some reason, I never tire of looking at the moon or reading about it! I enjoyed both poems, great form here! 💫🌛💫

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    1. msjadeli says:

      You and me both on the moon. It always surprises me where it is in the sky. The other night as I closed the blinds I saw its pretty crescent farther west than expected. Thank you, Tricia ❤

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      1. My pleasure, Lisa! ❣️

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  7. Sherry Marr says:

    This is beautiful. One needs all th wonder we can get and the moon is good at granting it. Smiles.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sherry, indeed.

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  8. memadtwo says:

    Wonderful flow to this. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kerfe.

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  9. Rall says:

    I love troiku form…well done! Lovely imagery.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rall, thank you very much. I’m writing troiku for the Poetry Postcard Festival this year and am enjoying it immensely.

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  10. “[T]he rorschach of the moon.
    always tells
    if our piano is in tune.”

    An absolute peach of a verse!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Veera, thank you so much, glad you enjoy it.

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  11. Love the last line especially…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Rajani, glad you connected with it.

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  12. Truedessa says:

    The allure of the moon has captured stargazers since the beginning of time. It stirs the heart of poets. I loved what you did here.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Truedessa, that wonder we have is wondrous. If we could only harness that universal connectedness in ways that can benefit our mother earth. Thank you ❤

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  13. Sunra Rainz says:

    I love the reflections in this poem. And the phrase “the rorschach of the moon”.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sunra, I fell in love with that when I read Samuel’s series also. What a way to set the tone of the series — and then he goes on to show us ❤

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      1. Sunra Rainz says:

        Ohhh and now I’ve read it too and it’s exquisite ❤ Thank you for sharing it.

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  14. Dale says:

    I love this, Lisa. I read it, like, four times 🙂
    Then I went to read the original – what a beautiful poem!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dale, I’m pleased that you’re pleased. It is a magnificent poem and I’m glad Mish included it in her dVerse post ❤

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      1. Dale says:

        So good. Both! 💞

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  15. Mish says:

    A gorgeous poem, Lisa…so concisely drawing off of each of those lines. I especially love the second stanza, that secretive moon keeping us wondering.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Mish, and they wouldn’t exist without your sharing Samuel’s exquisite poetry!

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  16. Loved Samuel Peralta’s verse and you picked the best one to do full justice to it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Punam, thank you very much. I’ve been doing troiku since July for POPO2022 and so when I saw Samuel’s first one and loved it my mind went to troiku.

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      1. You are welcome, Li. Yes, I have noticed that. It is a lovely form and reading yours I have been tempted to try it.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Punam, the poems I am writing for POPO won’t be published until October, but I have been doing a few here and there also. I absolutely think you should try it.

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          1. You have shared a few troiku here, if I am not wrong. Sure, ma’am, will give it a try. 👍🏼🙂

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            1. msjadeli says:

              Punam, all 4 haiku together make 1 troiku, which the creator of the form likened to the original being the sleigh and the 3 haiku that follow the horses pulling the sleigh. Please do and let me know when you do!

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              1. Thanks for sharing, Li. When I do, I will link back to this post.

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  17. Very nice, Lisa. I, too, like the “rorschach of the moon” line. 🌞

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Samuel does have a way with words. Not sure if you heard but an anthology of dVerse poets from a few years back is headed to the moon in the near future, thanks to Samuel (who used to be a dVerse host!)

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Thanks, Lisa!

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