POPO2022 day 5 — woman looking at white flower

card 5 woman looking at white flower resized

shoulders and neck rest
among curves of white petals
still in the garden

shoulders and neck rest
in triangle composure
against leathered green

among curved petals
a flower among flowers
wisp of cinnamon

still in the garden
dulcet streams of last night’s kiss
tease pink from her cheeks

11 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    Sweet. Love this.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you 🙂

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome my friend

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  2. memadtwo says:

    I have a question for you about this form–are you supposed to change line two of the original haiku to make it 5 syllables when it becomes the first line? I was struggling with that today when writing my door poem. I looked at the examples on the link but it wasn’t clear to me. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kerfe, I honestly don’t know. What I’ve experienced writing so many for POPO is that there is usually away to pare that 2nd line down a couple of syllables. You could probably ask Chevr…, the person who invented it what his intent was? If you find out, let me know…

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      1. memadtwo says:

        I’ll check it out later.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you 🙂

      Like

  3. Badfinger (Max) says:

    Good job Lisa…what you wrote brought the picture alive.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you so much, Max. She told me her story I just transmitted it ❤

      Liked by 1 person

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