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shoulders and neck rest
among curves of white petals
still in the garden
shoulders and neck rest
in triangle composure
against leathered green
among curved petals
a flower among flowers
wisp of cinnamon
still in the garden
dulcet streams of last night’s kiss
tease pink from her cheeks
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Sweet. Love this.
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Thank you 🙂
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You’re welcome my friend
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I have a question for you about this form–are you supposed to change line two of the original haiku to make it 5 syllables when it becomes the first line? I was struggling with that today when writing my door poem. I looked at the examples on the link but it wasn’t clear to me. (K)
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Kerfe, I honestly don’t know. What I’ve experienced writing so many for POPO is that there is usually away to pare that 2nd line down a couple of syllables. You could probably ask Chevr…, the person who invented it what his intent was? If you find out, let me know…
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I’ll check it out later.
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Lovely
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Thank you 🙂
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Your welcome
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Good job Lisa…what you wrote brought the picture alive.
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Thank you so much, Max. She told me her story I just transmitted it ❤
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