dVerse — Poetics — November: My Take

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No green is seen outside the windows
No sound but fans and sleeping cats
No clear blue sky, ‘stead snowflakes fall
No warmth of sun, a draft is all
No laughter of a toddler running
No parks or hills for her to climb
No seeds on ground for birds to find
No sight of squirrels nor chipmunk sound
No doubt the snow is here to stay
No bikes to ride on paths this way
No griping from the houseplant crowd
No time to waste to brew hot tea
No more poem to write today

Instead of recreating the wheel, I just continued with his style and personalized it.

Sarah is today’s host of dVerse’ Poetics. Sarah says:
I thought it might be fun to pay tribute to Thomas Hood’s poem.

34 Comments Add yours

  1. I love this update! I particularly enjoyed the toddler lines – and that use of “no doubt…” – very clever.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sarah, thank you!

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  2. What a brilliant way of being inspired… actually it is very powerful to write in negation… (we had a prompt with that once)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, it is, Bjorn. I remember that prompt and agree with you.

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  3. kim881 says:

    Good idea, Lisa – no point in reinventing the wheel when Hood has rolled it your way. And a great job you’ve done of it too. I was getting depressed by the draught, the lack of laughter, and no seeds for the birds, but the sleeping cats cheered me up. I love that sound – Mojo was snoring on my lap earlier and it was so cute!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Kim. Cats do make good lap warmers!

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  4. rothpoetry says:

    A very nice continuation, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dwight 🙂

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        You are welcome!

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  5. Gillena Cox says:

    Nice one

    Much💛love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Gillena!

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  6. memadtwo says:

    Plenty of those drafts here too…(K)

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  7. Sadje says:

    A bleak wintery picture

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Sadje. Winter is here too soon.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome. We still are using fans.

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  8. dorahak says:

    Lisa, No way this could be any better! 🙂

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  9. Truedessa says:

    There is no green outside my window tonight. The first snowfall of the season has arrived. Coating the ground winter white. I can tell you were inspired.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, I was, Truedessa, thanks 🙂

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  10. Certain days can feel very bleak indeed. Beautiful take, Lisa

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Shweta.

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  11. Dale says:

    Nicely done. I don’t agree with all of it (just most of it!) November is THE worst month, An in-between month of blech (mostly).

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I actually don’t mind it that much. Feb and March are the two worst for me, where winter hangs on at the end.

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      1. Dale says:

        Actually, I cannot really complain. Especially this year as I was wearing shorts on November 5! And today is our first snowfall (already a good 3-4 inches have fallen…) February, I swear, is the longest month!

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  12. Badfinger (Max) says:

    I get this one! It’s very cool because the inspiration comes from not being inspired in a way.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I like what you see here, Max, thanks 🙂

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  13. lesleyscoble says:

    This is how November should be. It is like summer here instead!
    I love this poem 🌹

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Lesley, I’d be happy to trade places with you for a day or two 🙂 Thank you.

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