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Dusk tiptoes in with its shadow feet
Colors slip away, leaving silhouettes
Birds huddle in pine; bare trees stand,
Silent witnesses to nighttime rituals —
All reminders of my cold, empty bed.

 

Grace is today’s host for dVerse’ Meet the Bar, for our final prompt of 2022.  Grace says:
Write a Zen poem. 

See you all in 2023!

48 Comments Add yours

  1. Carol anne says:

    I love this! ❤ ❤ well done i!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Carol Anne.

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  2. Sadje says:

    Beautiful and poignant

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sadje, thank you ❤

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      1. Sadje says:

        My pleasure, always

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  3. Paula Light says:

    Are you taking a break? Love the poem 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      dVerse is taking a break until 2023, which will also give me a big break but I’ll still be around. Thank you ❤

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  4. Ron. says:

    Air, trees (green and bare) birds and oh, my, that empty bed closer. Zenwonderful.

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  5. M Jay Dixit says:

    Really well done. The images you paint are all poignant, I hope you light up your room and make it warm and cozy.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Jay, thank you ❤

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  6. Sounds a bit sad to me. That string instrument for the traditional Chinese music sounds great!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It is, Christian. Although it’s a time for giving and spending time with loved ones, thinking of a loved one no longer around kind of washes out the color of the season. I agree with you on the music. I listened to quite a few offerings on youtube before settling on this one.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much.

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  7. You are so good at describing Nature in all of its aspects. Can’t say I enjoyed the chill of the last line. It hit too close to home.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Sylvia.

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  8. Yes, I think this is probably what the zen form should be, the observation that becomes a metaphor for your condition. Good one.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Jane, much appreciated.

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  9. Musical metaphors that so well depict the winter season. Wishing you a warm and cosy December and fond memories to cherish and hopefully share.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Susan.

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  10. sanaarizvi says:

    This is rich with both poignancy and depth, Lisa! I can picture those bare trees 💘💘

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sanaa, thank you very much ❤

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  11. dorahak says:

    Wow, that first line blew me away. Love it!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dora, thank you very much ❤

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  12. Rob Kistner says:

    It is that somber season Lisa, you reflected it wonderfully in this piece. I hope you have a wonderful holiday my friend, and I will see you next year. Peace and be safe.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Rob, yes it is. I know you will have a joyful holiday with your son, daughter in-law, and little grandson.

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  13. poetisatinta says:

    sad but beautiful reflection ❤

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  14. Helen says:

    A lovely few moments of Zen poetry .. reminding me of how much I treasure my down comforter! Wishing you a joyous Holiday, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Helen. May yours be Merry and Bright.

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  15. Grace says:

    The sadness of the last line is touching. Winter is bearable only when its shared with family; otherwise, its really cold and lonely. Enjoy the break. Thanks for being part of our team. See you in 2023!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Grace ❤

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  16. That loneliness has to be hard… and even harder during the holidays.

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  17. Nice! The first line and last line would even make a great two-line poem.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yvonne, thank you so much 🙂

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  18. rothpoetry says:

    Wonderful Lisa! Your last line twist is perfect!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dwight, thank you very much. It was a tough poem to inhabit.

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        :>) You are welcome!

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  19. Badfinger (Max) says:

    That picture is so bleak…you did great with the feeling or atmosphere.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you so much, Max.

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      1. Badfinger (Max) says:

        Did you take that picture?

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Yes. It’s one I used last year in with a haiku (if you look close you’ll see the squirrels nest up there in a tree) but with this I stripped the color and light out of it.

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          1. Badfinger (Max) says:

            It conveys loneliness so well.

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            1. msjadeli says:

              It gets lonely here in the winter.

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              1. Badfinger (Max) says:

                Yea winter is written all over it. I can’t imagine one of your winters.

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