dVerse — Q168 — Winter Tears

winter tears

Red plume finery cannot deflect;
Angel pink dips cannot stem;
White sheet bark cannot turn,
nor wood smoke drift to gone,
today’s cursed canvas of gloom.

Its stench cannot be washed off.
Ice crystal tears weep in dismay.

Until sun sword slices to blue.

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Mish is today’s host of dVerse’ Quadrille Monday. Mish says:
Write a quadrille; must be exactly 44 words, not counting the title and must include ice
or a form of the word.

66 Comments Add yours

  1. The turn at the end, and that sun sword – really cuts through (sorry!) the gloom you create.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Sarah! I actually had a different line at the end, but then the sun did burst out! Thanks Sol!

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  2. It is magic when the sun comes out, especially in a few weeks when it also sends some warmth…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes it is and just a few weeks away now…

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  3. kim881 says:

    Stunning use of colour in your quadrille, Lisa!

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      1. kim881 says:

        You are very welcome, Lisa!

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  4. All those frozen colours. Like popsicles. Frozen until the sun cuts through.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Nice visual with the popsicles 🙂

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  5. Mish says:

    A beautiful poem to read aloud, Lisa. I especially enjoyed the phrase “cursed canvass of gloom” and the sun was a welcome ending.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Mish!

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  6. Carol anne says:

    A beautiful poem Li! 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Carol Anne!

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  7. rothpoetry says:

    A great poem, Lisa. Love your images. Ice crystal tears weeping is such a great image!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dwight, thanks much.

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  8. Ron. says:

    Ahhh… Sun! Now, if only it had some heat…
    Wonderfully imagistic, Lisa. Thanks.

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  9. Jim says:

    “Ice crystal tears weep in dismay,” they
    should have more faith in Sun and its sword.
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Good point, Jim. Faith is what is needed.

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  10. dorahak says:

    A gripping read, Lisa. Well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dora, thanks much ❤

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  11. memadtwo says:

    That blue sky does dispel the canvas of gloom. Hoping for some to come our way soon…(K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kerfe. It has been most rare this winter here 😦

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      1. memadtwo says:

        Here too. I miss those crisp crystal clear skies.

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  12. Lovely poem. I especially like the closing lines of a sun sword.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Arcadia 🙂

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  13. lynn__ says:

    Winter would be unbearable without some sunshine! I “like” your poem, Lisa (even if button didn’t work.)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Lynn thank you and yes it would be. WP always seems to have glitches, thanks for letting me know.

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      1. lynn__ says:

        I think it was on my end…can’t stay logged in?!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Hoping the “happiness engineers” can help you with it. Any glitches I get I go to the live chat and it usually gets fixed within that day or the next day.

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  14. Badfinger (Max) says:

    Goes with the picture so well Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Max, this is one where I found the picture in my files after an ice search and then wrote the poem. Thank you.

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  15. Sadje says:

    Oh so poignant and beautiful Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje 🙂

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome Li

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  16. M Jay Dixit says:

    The imagery is beautiful, I really dig the last line. Bravo!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Jay, thanks much!

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  17. Its stench cannot be washed off.

    OOF! This is hard-hitting piece, Lisa ❤

    ~David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, David.

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  18. merrildsmith says:

    I love that sun sword. That is just what it’s like sometimes!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It sure was slicing through the gray yesterday. Thanks, Merril.

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      1. merrildsmith says:

        You’re welcome, Lisa!

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  19. kittysverses says:

    Beautiful array of colours in your poem, Li. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kitty, thank you very much.

      Like

  20. Gillena Cox says:

    Happy to hear that your sun has sliced through.

    Much❤love

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      It was a rare and welcomed sighting these days, thank you, Gillena.

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  21. Jules says:

    Ah… the sun and its light that takes about 8 minutes to get to us. We are expecting snow… tomorrow.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Hoping you get a nice snowstorm, Jules. We have some still on the ground but not nearly the usual.

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      1. Jules says:

        We had some snow cover… for a few hours before the rain. By the next morning it was all gone.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          How’s your weather now? It’s a real blizzard today. I hope my son can get home after he leaves work. He’s got a 45 mile+ drive home 😦

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          1. Jules says:

            The sun is out and it is about 38F.
            Just some movement of cloud cover.
            I hope your son gets home safely as well!

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            1. msjadeli says:

              Lucky you with the sun out! Time to pray 😉

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              1. Jules says:

                …not for long.

                Hope …he got home OK!!

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                  1. Jules says:

                    That’s very good!!

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  22. love this Lisa and the stench is best outside. Nice job on the prompt👏

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Cindy!

      Like

  23. How lovely, Lisa. I love the sun sword! ☀️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Colleen!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you! It was a tough write. I had another poem started but reached an impasse. Once I let the Muse have her way…

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      1. poetisatinta says:

        Sometimes you just have to wait for her to arrive 🙂

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