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“Eternal Dance,” by geckobird

I’ll admit to you, but to deny to all others
my immortal pledge, my plum juicy love
the sugar for my tea, crumpet joy of union
as incarnations spin, seems dizzy curse
through beings, puzzling karmic inequity
as we swirl, flawed, an unsolvable jigsaw;
at every chance meeting, while aeons flux
our spring blooms will dance, hope pass

Laura is today’s host for dVerse’ Meet the Bar/Form.
I chose the contrapuntal with admit – deny.

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41 Comments Add yours

  1. kim881 says:

    What a slickly executed contrapuntal, Lisa! I love the foody phrases ‘plum juicy love and ‘crumpet joy of union’ – did you know that, in the UK, a bit of crumpet is slang for a sexually desirable woman?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kim, thanks! No I did not know that about crumpet lol, but it seems to fit 🙂

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  2. I too picked up on the delicious innuendos but then it is Spring! and I love the tight dialogue between your two poems Lisa

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Laura, thanks much.

      Like

  3. merrildsmith says:

    I love all the fun word play–and yes, as Laura wrote, “delicious innuendos.” 🙂
    Delightful, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Merril 🙂

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      1. merrildsmith says:

        You’re welcome!

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  4. memadtwo says:

    I like the food references too. It’s all puzzling, all of it. (K)

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  5. Gillena Cox says:

    I knew the crumpet reference 😊

    Interesting cleave

    Much💜love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Gillena 🙂

      Like

  6. Sadje says:

    Very well written my friend.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks a lot, Sadje ❤

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      1. Sadje says:

        Most welcome

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  7. Wow, so this is two poems combined in one? Once again, I’m amazed how you come up with these things! 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I follow good prompts and magic happens. Thank you, Christian 🙂

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      1. It surely oftentimes looks like magic to me!

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  8. rothpoetry says:

    Nicely done, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dwight.

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        You are welcome!

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  9. Deliciously created and full of beautiful flow. Love It.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Paul, thanks much. Laura’s prompt gave it a good start.

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  10. M Jay Dixit says:

    Wow! So nicely done, Lisa. From the title to the ending line(s), a masterpiece!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Jay, very happy you like how it turned out. Thank you so much.

      Like

  11. Dale says:

    This is delightful! I read it the three ways and I like the joined one best.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dale so happy you enjoyed the poem. It was an enriching experience to write it.

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      1. Dale says:

        I don’t doubt it. I have attempted the form but once!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Are you going to write to this one??

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            1. msjadeli says:

              😦 pretty please?

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              1. Dale says:

                Haha! I think not. I’m working on my ice storm post 🙂

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  12. What a deliciously delightful write, Li! Tightly woven and it worked beautifully. ❤️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Punam, your appreciation makes me happy. Thank you ❤

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      1. My pleasure. ❤️

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  13. Great fun with words and lovely poem Lisa! ❣️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Cindy!

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      1. You’re so welcome Lisa!💕

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  14. Badfinger (Max) says:

    This one is very interesting…I like how it is set up

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      It was a satisfying challenge to write. Thank you again, Max.

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