dVerse — Q190 — Now Ashes

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Chalk outline-sketched
Yellow tape-festooned
Relationship crime scene
February’s dead Valentines

Grabbed, slabbed, toe-tagged
Evidence room desert
Forensics team stymied
Cold case mystery

No bodies claimed
Morgue now overflowing
Hearts in limbo

Convoy of hearses
Cruise Crematory Lane
Purge in flame

Ashes in the wind.

Mish is today’s host for dVerse’ Quadrille Monday.  Mish says:
write a quadrille (exactly 44 words, minus title) using the word sketch.

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  1. Dora's avatar dorahak says:

    Love’s crimes, cold cases all, after they’ve been purged “in flame.” Wow! The mystery lover in me reveled in the forensic lingo and clinical voice, Lisa.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      <3 Dora, thank you!

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      1. Dora's avatar dorahak says:

        You’re most welcome! 😉

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  2. lillian's avatar lillian says:

    ohhhh this one is hard to read. Forensic lingo indeed….and a sad motorcade of hearses….ashes to ashes, dust to dust….

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      “sad motorcade” great term, Lillian. Thank you for reading and your comment.

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  3. Dale's avatar Dale says:

    This is both heartbreaking and horrifying! Well done, you.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Dale, thank you!

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      1. Dale's avatar Dale says:

        You’re welcome :)

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  4. Mish's avatar Mish says:

    The hard truth… love can claim so many victims. I love the lingo and this packs a punch, Lisa!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Appreciate the comment, Mish. Thank you and thank you for the prompt word.

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  5. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta says:

    Such a great take on the prompt word, who would have thought you could create poetry from this forensic maelstrom – well done Lisa 🙌

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Ange, thanks! :)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Melissa, please say how you see it as devious! I really want to know.

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      1. It was the first word that came to mind for me for overall mood.

        “Chalk outline-sketched
        Yellow tape-festooned
        Relationship crime scene”

        It seems likely that something devious happened!

        These lines also brought to mind (for me) the St. Valentine’s Day Massacre:

        “February’s dead Valentines
        Grabbed, slabbed, toe-tagged
        Evidence room desert”

        PS–I love the music video. I love Cake.

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        1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

          Ah, thanks for helping me see <3 Cake is tasty isn't it :)

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  6. memadtwo's avatar memadtwo says:

    The perils of love…so many victims. And yet we keep jumping into the fire. (K)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Such a great comment, K. Indeed!

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  7. Gillena Cox's avatar Gillena Cox says:

    Wow!!! This one is sketched to the dark side

    Much🖤love

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Gillena. I love the first line of your quadrille.

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  8. Carol C's avatar Carol C says:

    So, that is where the dead Valentines go! What a great quadrille Lisa!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Carol <3

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  9. Wow…what a take on the prompt. Very cleverly done.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Di, thanks much :)

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  10. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:

    An excellent quadrille, Lisa. Very sad to see the death and destruction going on across the world and every day here in Charlotte as well!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      What’s going on in Charlotte??

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      1. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:

        In Charlotte we have a shooting almost every day. It is often between teens that know each other. Very sad to see going on.

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        1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

          That is a lot of shooting going on. I’m guessing some bystanders get hit by mistake from time to time.

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          1. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:

            Sadly, yes… and children too at times.

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  11. Jim's avatar Jim says:

    A serial killer on the loose in your neighborhood? Keeping the hearses busy.

    ..

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      A steady stream headed to the crematorium, Jim.

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  12. Sadje's avatar Sadje says:

    Ooh so dark Li!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Things just got real ;)

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      1. Sadje's avatar Sadje says:

        👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼

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  13. Unknown's avatar Anonymous says:

    Ooh, so many questions – and you also went down the crime route!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Someone!

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  14. merrildsmith's avatar merrildsmith says:

    So sad–cleverly written, Lisa.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Merril. Wanted to let you know I got your email and thank you for the heads-up.

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      1. merrildsmith's avatar merrildsmith says:

        You’re welcome, Lisa!

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  15. Badfinger (Max)'s avatar Badfinger (Max) says:

    They sure stay busy in this day and time…very well written.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Max, thank you very much, yes they do.

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  16. hdwoonie23's avatar Helen says:

    Love where you took the challenge … right to forensics, the artist sketch. Also love the sketches in your art piece, all the positioning.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Helen, thank you so much. Third time was the charm (had tried 2 other times on other topics and couldn’t make it work with them.)

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  17. Oh my, this is very tragic.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      It is. Humans have been given a paradise and this is what they do with their gift.

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  18. glyn40wilton's avatar glyn40wilton says:

    Can I say thank you for introducing me to Cake.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Sure you can :) You’re welcome.

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  19. zipferlake's avatar zipferlake says:

    Love crime scene, great how you pulled this out of the prompt sketch.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Happy you enjoyed it :)

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  20. Lisa, this is stunning! I love the rhythm, and it reads like a poetic murder mystery!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Colleen. I like the designation you give it.

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      1. Yay! You are very clever… I would have never thought to write it this way. I really like it!

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  21. The language used is perfect for the prompt, and I think it talks loudly about domestic abuse

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Bjorn, and I agree about the DV.

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  22. pvcann's avatar pvcann says:

    I took it as metaphor, but on either level it packs a punch, yellow tape – a final mortal boundary.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and your insightful comment, Paul.

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  23. Wow, this one took me on quite the journey. 🤓👍

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Hey, Gia, I watched 2 episodes of The Squid Games series. About what I expected. Sorry, not my thing, but because of you I did give it a try :)

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      1. Thanks for letting me know. 🤓🙏
        I haven’t watched the remaining episodes yet but I sure will in the next week or so. I look forward to seeing all the different characters under pressure the kind of pressure I personally want not part of. And of course, I want to see the character who actually wins, especially if it ends up being someone unexpected.

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        1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

          I’d like to see those things also but it’s a guilty type of pleasure to watch it. I do know that the guy everyone hates (#432?) is likeable to me. I think there is a little envy going on there. That mother-son team cracks me up.

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          1. The infamous 432, quite the character. Not his biggest fan either. It would be amazing if the momma won the whole thing. 🤓

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            1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

              :) You’ll have to let me know how it turns out.

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  24. *APPLAUSE!*

    Excellent, Lisa!

    Sincerely,
    David

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you, David <3

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  25. lesleyscoble's avatar lesleyscoble says:

    I’m worried. I find this poem extremely cool. 😎
    It’s fantastic! 👏

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Lesley, many thanks and happy it resonates with you <3

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