Night’s Possessions
Black velvet veiled, bright visitor alights
slipping through slats, staining them; white
eerie eyeball, entering my musings
as a large leering (lunatic perhaps?)
Incensed at her ingress, ill-prepared
to defend my dreams, indubitably I resist.
I love you, my lovely; but Luna, they’re mine.
Björn is today’s host of dVerse’ Meeting the Bar. Björn says:
today I want you to try your poetic skills in writing alliterative verse.
Tao Talk 
Clever play with words: lunatic and Luna. Love all the alliteration here.
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That’s lillian….not anonymous – forgot to put in my name!
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Thanks much, Lillian. You almost have to get clever to make the alliteration work, at least for this newbie to the form.
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Nice use of the prompt, Lisa. Clever poem of the moon’s intrusion.
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Thanks much, Dwight, glad you enjoyed it.
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You are welcome!
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Very nice pairing today!
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:) I’ve been trying to get a pic of the moon shining through the blinds for awhile. I really had no idea where this poem was going.
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Yet somehow you always make it work!
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Well-done, Lisa. But “white eerie eyeball” got my attention! 🙂
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Thanks, Merril! I wasn’t sure whether to have it end with the line or enjamb it into the next. I think it works both ways.
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You’re welcome, Lisa.
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I think we sense light even when we don’t “see” it. In this case, it feels like an invasion. (K)
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I think you’re right! I didn’t see it but I felt it, flipped over, and grabbed the phone.
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Cool poem today Lisa! :-) I loved it!
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Carol Anne, I’ve had this pic for a few days and wanted to use it for a poem. When I saw Bjorn’s prompt I knew it would be the subject of it.
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So good Li.
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Thank you, Sadje <3
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You’re always welcome
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The poem and the Pink Floyd song. Unbeatable pairing.
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Fandango, thanks :)
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Awesome alliteration! Amazing.
Fantastic Floyd video.
Good one, Lisa!
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Thanks much, Nancy :)
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“I love you, my lovely; but Luna, they’re mine.”
Lovely, Li. :)
Even the opening lines are excellent, I think you’ve done double alliterations. :)
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Many thanks, Kitty <3
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Such captivating poetry ❤️
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Thanks much, Aboli :)
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Talk about alliteration … eerie eyeballs set the stage for everything wonderfully clever that followed. Cheers. I am listening to the music as I type my comment. LOVE IT.
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Helen glad you connected with the poem and the music. They make a good duo I think.
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Ah, it’s that old stalker, Luna, “white/eerie eyeball, entering my musings”! Tension-fragught, but at the end, what a gentle rejection of her intrusion: “I love you, my lovely; but Luna, they’re mine.” Loved it, Lisa!
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Dora, thank you for your wonderful comment.
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You nailed this one! Well done, Madam.
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Dale, thanks!
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My pleasure.
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I love the last line, and the way you work with the moon and luna lunatic.
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Glad it pleases you, Bjorn. Your prompt made it possible.
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That last line, Li, is fantastic! I so enjoyed reading your excellent verse aloud. ❤️
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Punam, thank you very much <3
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Greetings! I edit Forgotten Ground Regained (https://alliteration.net), a website devoted to modern English alliterative verse. I recently came across this poem, and wanted to let you know I’ve added a link to it to my index listing poetry blog posts containing alliterative verse. You can find it here:
https://alliteration.net/community/poetswriters/
Thanks for sharing your work!
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Thanks for adding me to your index. Will you please edit my name in there? My name is Ms Jade Li, not M.S. jadeli. You can just put in there as Jade Li also. Thanks much.
I had no idea there was a website devoted to alliterative verse. Very cool :)
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