Off They Go^

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Tonight’s dverse poet’s cafe topic is fire and it can be in any form.  This one may be in a form but no guarantees.

 

two extinguished travelers

searching for shelter

where warmth could be

and found each other

*

kindling of combustible memories

tossed into the pyre

ignited by unvalidated emotions

consumed by mutual witness

*

wounds picked open

their poisons drained

gaping flesh exposed

cauterized with validation

*

passion roared

heating hearth and home

orange gold windows

frigid blasts held at bay

*

steaming coffee and tea

warm biscuits with stew

peach pie a la mode

storehouse of nourishment

*

seasons of drought

parched crops

smoldering fields

gnawing dis-ease

*

fears reanimate

doubts conflagrate

tempers incinerate

chill infiltrates

*

cold hearth, empty windows

two extinguished travelers

searching for shelter

where warmth could be

 

^  the title is a play off of Pearl Jam’s song, “Off He Goes”

(in both title and theme)

33 Comments Add yours

  1. jillys2016's avatar jillys2016 says:

    Nice job of coming full circle!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      thank you jilly!

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  2. qbit's avatar qbit says:

    “consumed by mutual witness” – great language!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      thank you very much

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  3. I like the circular structure of this poem, Ms. Jadeli. Each stanza can stand alone–I especially like the 3rd.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much Victoria

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  4. VJ's avatar V.J. Knutson says:

    Where there is fire…there is relationship…well done.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks so much VJ :)

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  5. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar's avatar Margaret Elizabeth Bednar says:

    could be … says a lot. and we are back into the circuality of the poem… I find myself wanting to change movies and books so the ending can be different…. :)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      you never know what the future might bring. maybe in the sequel? ;)

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  6. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:

    A very nice poem. Love the flow and the development of relationships.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much :)

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  7. Gina@alifelesslived's avatar Gina says:

    i enjoyed how you used both cold and heat to demonstrate the sensation that fire brings

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you Gina. Glad you enjoyed it :)

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  8. Janice's avatar Janice says:

    It feels like you are using a form here (it could be yours or known to others)…it was an element that made me want to keep reading.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Yes, Janice, it is a diamante form. Glad to hear the diamond drew you in :)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Astrid! glad you liked it

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  9. rob kistner's avatar rob kistner says:

    Jade, like the circular connection of the encouter… :-)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Rob. I was of two minds here. One is that it was the relationship of a lifetime for both of them and may never come again. Another is that both individuals are trapped in the vicious cycle of serial relationships.

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  10. Frank Hubeny's avatar Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice sounding stanza: “fears reanimate

    doubts conflagrate

    tempers incinerate

    chill infiltrates”

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Frank :)

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  11. I have a feeling that there are those relationships that are passionate for all the wrong reasons… and in the end there is ashes

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Agreed but many times only seen in retrospect…

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  12. Rivers of the Heart
    Tributaries on Fire
    Hidden Streams Flood…

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      thank you for the comment in haiku form! <3

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      1. Winks.. i Don’t Know
        How to Write Poetry..
        i Fired Form With Free..:)

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        1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

          methinks a poet be thee :)

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  13. me THinKs
    You Are A Kind
    Fire LiT SMiLe MarKeR
    On A Poetry Trail..;)

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  14. This is beautiful. Relationships can inspire lot of words.

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  15. lynn__'s avatar lynn__ says:

    Sometimes things heat up too fast and then fizzle out…

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  16. :-) I enjoyed this one very much !

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