#FF — Bitten


PHOTO PROMPT © Fatima Fakier Deria

She felt empty inside; her source of sustenance had been consumed. On top of that, her reservoir for hope held nothing.

James stood as a ghost of the man she remembered by the window, almost physically translucent. The expression on his face showed the anguish of a person with a tongue laden with unsaid volumes.

Sunrise was approaching.

“I need to go. I didn’t choose it, but now that I am this creature of the night, there is nothing to do but accept it. I had to come back to say good-bye, my love.”

With a sharp smile he was gone.

 

 

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the entertaining host of Friday Fictioneers.

56 Comments Add yours

  1. Dale says:

    Nice out of the box story, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It’s that time of the season for scary stories. Thank you, Dale 🙂

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    At least she still has him at night

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  3. oooooooooooooooooh! right in time for halloween … 😉

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    A suitably Halloween-esque tale for this week. Maybe she will decide to join him…!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Well I wouldn’t have to worry about staying up too late ever again….

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  5. trentpmcd says:

    When I read his little monologue, the first thing I thought of was, “I’m going to give you choice. I never had a choice.” Perhaps he isn’t going to give her a choice either, but in a very different way….

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Excellent perspective, Trent. He loves her too much to do that to her.

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  6. What a spooky parting… so interesting that we both saw the emptiness in the picture. but with so different reasons.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Just read your story and see what you mean! Marten was a real ghoul just in another way.

      Like

  7. memadtwo says:

    The presence of absence…(K)

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  8. Dear Lisa,

    Tis the season. Nicely constructed.

    Shalom and Happy Halloween,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, thank you, and glad you liked it.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

      Like

  9. Of Tupperware and vampires, a match made only on Halloween. 🎃 I like it

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    1. msjadeli says:

      lol thank you, Tracey!

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  10. Nobbinmaug says:

    I hate vampiric Tupperware.

    Nice take. I totally forgot about Halloween when I did mine. Bonus points for the Nosferatu pic at the bottom.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      So funny, vampiric Tupperware. Thank you, Nobbin, glad you liked it.

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  11. plaridel says:

    i love the twist. i was totally taken off guard. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Good 🙂 Thanks and glad you enjoyed it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje 🙂

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      1. Sadje says:

        A pleasure Li

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  12. At least he didn’t say ‘trick or treat’ when he turned up!

    Here’s my contribution!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Such a great comment, Keith.

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  13. draliman says:

    I love the imagery, especially the first paragraph.
    I wonder if she’ll go looking for him later, to join him as a creature of the night…?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Ali. I hope she doesn’t, but you never know…

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  14. Jules says:

    Lost love… and choices that sometimes we don’t make for ourselves.
    Good (as my Dad would say) Hollow dog story… hollow weenie… 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      ❤ Thank you for your comment and Happy Hollow Dog! 🙂

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  15. Wow – this was a great take on the photo prompt. Beautifully done!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Susan.

      Like

  16. Scary, Lisa..A ghost of a man is a normal term, which could have meant anything, but his being a creature of the night puts quite a twist onto it

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks, Larry.

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  17. Your imagination playing with the creepy holiday.
    Nicely done … Happy Halloween
    Isadora😎

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, glad you enjoyed my story.

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  18. James McEwan says:

    Fitting story for Halloween. Nice writing, I think you captured the mood spot on.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you so much, James!

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  19. Definitely a fitting take on the photo prompt for this time of year, a little eerie, but also full of love.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and your comment.

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  20. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh you made this quite sad. A tale of love lost to the night. Well done

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Laurie.

      Like

  21. Abhijit Ray says:

    Poor James! He must have agreed to do something terrible and bound by the agreement. Unfortunate when people become so helpless.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Very possible, Abhijit. Thank you for reading and commenting.

      Like

  22. granonine says:

    That’s a horror story for both of them. Nicely portrayed.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Linda. Yes it is.

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  23. I love the soft spookiness of your story, also a love story. An imaginative take on the prompt.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and your comment.

      Like

  24. magarisa says:

    A haunting, poignant tale. I particularly like the first line, which relates so well to the empty containers in the photo. Great job, Li!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Magarisa, that’s how I got the story started, by looking at those containers 🙂 Glad you liked it, thank you.

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      1. magarisa says:

        That’s exactly how a photo prompt should work. 🙂 You’re welcome.

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  25. He was literally the ghost of the man she knew. I like how you used the prompt to inspire the soft-creepy-wistfulness of your story.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much for reading and commenting, Fatima.

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  26. Carol Anne says:

    I’m only seeing this one now weeks after halloweens over and done! I loved it! ❤

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you enjoyed it 🙂

      Like

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