PHOTO PROMPT © Fatima Fakier Deria
She felt empty inside; her source of sustenance had been consumed. On top of that, her reservoir for hope held nothing.
James stood as a ghost of the man she remembered by the window, almost physically translucent. The expression on his face showed the anguish of a person with a tongue laden with unsaid volumes.
Sunrise was approaching.
“I need to go. I didn’t choose it, but now that I am this creature of the night, there is nothing to do but accept it. I had to come back to say good-bye, my love.”
With a sharp smile he was gone.
Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the entertaining host of Friday Fictioneers.
Nice out of the box story, Lisa!
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It’s that time of the season for scary stories. Thank you, Dale 🙂
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🙂
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At least she still has him at night
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Ummmmmm no!
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oooooooooooooooooh! right in time for halloween … 😉
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🙂
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A suitably Halloween-esque tale for this week. Maybe she will decide to join him…!
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Well I wouldn’t have to worry about staying up too late ever again….
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When I read his little monologue, the first thing I thought of was, “I’m going to give you choice. I never had a choice.” Perhaps he isn’t going to give her a choice either, but in a very different way….
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Excellent perspective, Trent. He loves her too much to do that to her.
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What a spooky parting… so interesting that we both saw the emptiness in the picture. but with so different reasons.
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Just read your story and see what you mean! Marten was a real ghoul just in another way.
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The presence of absence…(K)
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Dear Lisa,
Tis the season. Nicely constructed.
Shalom and Happy Halloween,
Rochelle
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Rochelle, thank you, and glad you liked it.
Shalom,
Lisa
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Of Tupperware and vampires, a match made only on Halloween. 🎃 I like it
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lol thank you, Tracey!
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I hate vampiric Tupperware.
Nice take. I totally forgot about Halloween when I did mine. Bonus points for the Nosferatu pic at the bottom.
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So funny, vampiric Tupperware. Thank you, Nobbin, glad you liked it.
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i love the twist. i was totally taken off guard. 🙂
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Good 🙂 Thanks and glad you enjoyed it.
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Good one!
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Thank you, Sadje 🙂
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A pleasure Li
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At least he didn’t say ‘trick or treat’ when he turned up!
Here’s my contribution!
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Such a great comment, Keith.
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I love the imagery, especially the first paragraph.
I wonder if she’ll go looking for him later, to join him as a creature of the night…?
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Thanks, Ali. I hope she doesn’t, but you never know…
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Lost love… and choices that sometimes we don’t make for ourselves.
Good (as my Dad would say) Hollow dog story… hollow weenie… 🙂
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❤ Thank you for your comment and Happy Hollow Dog! 🙂
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Wow – this was a great take on the photo prompt. Beautifully done!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you very much, Susan.
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Scary, Lisa..A ghost of a man is a normal term, which could have meant anything, but his being a creature of the night puts quite a twist onto it
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🙂 Thanks, Larry.
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Your imagination playing with the creepy holiday.
Nicely done … Happy Halloween
Isadora😎
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed my story.
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Fitting story for Halloween. Nice writing, I think you captured the mood spot on.
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Thank you so much, James!
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Definitely a fitting take on the photo prompt for this time of year, a little eerie, but also full of love.
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Thank you for reading and your comment.
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Oh you made this quite sad. A tale of love lost to the night. Well done
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Thank you, Laurie.
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Poor James! He must have agreed to do something terrible and bound by the agreement. Unfortunate when people become so helpless.
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Very possible, Abhijit. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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That’s a horror story for both of them. Nicely portrayed.
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Thank you very much, Linda. Yes it is.
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I love the soft spookiness of your story, also a love story. An imaginative take on the prompt.
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Thank you for reading and your comment.
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A haunting, poignant tale. I particularly like the first line, which relates so well to the empty containers in the photo. Great job, Li!
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Magarisa, that’s how I got the story started, by looking at those containers 🙂 Glad you liked it, thank you.
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That’s exactly how a photo prompt should work. 🙂 You’re welcome.
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He was literally the ghost of the man she knew. I like how you used the prompt to inspire the soft-creepy-wistfulness of your story.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting, Fatima.
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I’m only seeing this one now weeks after halloweens over and done! I loved it! ❤
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Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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