dVerse — Old (New) Dream Deferred

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Siren 17, taken August 11, 2020

Now nudging daisies
Home away from home
Blue dreams of water
When my sails unfurled
Or putting along
Aquamarine world
Wedged in sugar sand
Only wave laps heard

Sun gleams, moon silvers
Celestial smiles
I, their wee daughter
Toddled my tiller
Through duckweed blankets
That dipped and quivered
Now red right return
Old (new) dream deferred

 

 

 

Today’s offering is in the form of an Octameter.   Octameter, created by Shelley A. Cephas, is a poem made up of 16 lines divided into two stanzas of 8 lines each. Each line has a syllable count of 5. The set rhyme scheme is: a/b/c/d/e/d/f/d g/h/c/g/i/g/d/d.

Sarah is today’s host for dVerse.  Sarah says:
For this prompt, I’d like you to be inspired by boats.

53 Comments Add yours

  1. Lucy says:

    Wow, this has beautiful and captivating imagery. It’s just amazing!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Lucy 🙂

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  2. Oh a boat on the shore is a sad sight… I hope she will see the water soon.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Bjorn, yes and yes.

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  3. Nice form, Lisa, and you use it very well. There’s a light touch to this. Sad to see a boat out of water, but nice to have those memories.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sarah, yes and yes.

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  4. Love the imagery, Li. “Blue dreams of water” …sigh! 💙

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you much, Punam 🙂

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  5. Ingrid says:

    I love the idea of an old (new) dream deferred, and you’ve made a wonderful poem out of it. I have many deferred dreams of my own I think!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you connected with it, Ingrid, thank you 🙂

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  6. Beverly Crawford says:

    I simply love that phrase “toddled my tiller” It seems it could be applied to any number of situations! It goes in my book along side “fluffing my tutu”.!

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  7. The Raven is in trochaic octameter.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I had to look that one up. Interesting 🙂

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      1. One of my favorite poems.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Poe was a one of a kind.

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  8. memadtwo says:

    A mixed bag of memories…but meaningful ones. A ship in need of water. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, K, for sure.

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  9. soniadogra says:

    Thank you for this treat!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sonia, you’re welcome, glad you enjoyed it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome Li.

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  10. Oh, the sailboat in a sea of green… very well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes that should be a line! Thank you, D!

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  11. rothpoetry says:

    That boat looks like it is begging you to take her out on the water! No Covid out there! Nice poem Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, she does and is 🙂 Dwight, it just might happen. I’ve been giving her some thought.

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  12. calmkate says:

    This is delightful imagery, obviously your memories of sailing are happy ones!

    It’s something I never really tried, not a confident swimmer …

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Not all of the memories were happy with sailing but those are the things I chose to remember in the poem. I couldn’t swim to save my life; float maybe until help arrived. I always wore a life vest and we only sailed in an inland lake, which is very different than Lake MI or the ocean.

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      1. calmkate says:

        glad you stayed safe!

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  13. Amazing use of alliteration and imagery! sugar sand sounds awesome 😁

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jay. Sugar sand is awesome 🙂

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  14. judeitakali says:

    A beautiful form, beautifully done

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jude.

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      1. judeitakali says:

        My pleasure 🌼

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  15. your imagery takes my breath away. you made it in a form, too!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much 🙂

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  16. ‘Toddled my tiller’ That is truly inventive word creation!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you, Jane!

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  17. Brendan says:

    A dry docked (backyard) boat waits for a different time … soft-lapping mediation here, as if the boat were afloat.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and your comment, Brendan.

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  18. gillena says:

    “Wedged in sugar sand”
    Nice image. Hope you can be back i the water soon. In the meantime Stay Safe

    Much✏love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Gillena thank you and hoping happens. You stay safe also, my friend ❤

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  19. rivrvlogr says:

    This is very evocative. I like that closing line, like parcelling out memories that bring satisfaction, while not abandoning hope for further memories.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ken.

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  20. So many great lines Lisa ☺️ Nudging daisies … wedged in sugar sand … and Toddled my tiller! Loved the story of your boat and hope you get to play on it soon.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Christine!

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  21. lillian says:

    I love the magical feeling of this….especially “sugar sand” !

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Lillian. It’s what they call it here 🙂

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