My subject to write on was my older son, now in his 30’s. We had lunch together outside of his workplace yesterday. We sat in our bag chairs on a spot of grass off of the parking lot.
I set the timer for ten minutes and let the stream flow. Then I read through the page and circled words that jumped out, which are the words in the beginning of each line. In parentheses, I added to the lines to create the poem.
Son (bright in the sky)
strong (beams travel to earth)
character (that twinkle with wisdom)
calm (absorbent well)
vision (beacon to orient by)
grow (facets reflecting)
favor (seasoned warmth)
morphing (diffusing, expanding)
adjusting (dynamic lens)
star (traversing light years)
unseen (spirit traveler)
threatened (at shadows edge)
wonder (mysterious)
attention (and mindful)
backlash (challenges met)
carry the burden (with stoic steps)
move forward (morning comes)
arise (each day)
Here, without the circled words, is the poem:
Bright in the sky,
beams travel to earth
that twinkle with wisdom.
Absorbent well,
beacon to orient by,
facets reflecting
seasoned warmth.
Diffusing, expanding
dynamic lens
traversing light years.
Spirit traveler
at shadows edge,
mysterious
and mindful;
challenges met
with stoic steps.
Morning comes
each day.
Grace is today’s host of dVerse. Grace says:
write a stream-of consciousness poem.
I love to be part of your process… and understanding your son a little bit better.
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Thank you, Bjorn.
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Yes, very nice this process. I like the correspondences.: Bright in the sky and so on. Imaginative.
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Thank you, Ricardo.
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I like how you did this, taking such a methodical route and producing a string of bright images linked by your thought processes. The result is lovely.
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Jane, thank you.
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Pleasure 🙂
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I love the way you’ve highlighted all the qualities you love and appreciate in your son: his character and your pride as a mother both come shining through. I am in the process of writing poems about my sons and this has inspired me to get on with it!
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Ingrid, I appreciate your comment. So neat you are writing about your sons also and glad the poem is inspiring you.
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Oh this is so heartfelt! I love the way you have highlighted and portrayed all the qualities 💝
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Sanaa, thank you ❤
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How very creative, and clever to let us in on the process. Certainly a unique way of rocking the prompt. I’m old school. I just start writing, only lifting the pen to start on fresh pages of paper.
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Thank you, Glenn! I tried closing my eyes and writing with automatic writing first but nothing emerged, so I did your old school thing and wrote for 10 minutes. As the subject matter was a little too revealing, I went on to the next step.
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What did he say when you read him your poem?
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You must be a mind reader. After I posted the poem, I emailed him a copy. He hasn’t gotten back with me yet. He’ll probably think, there goes crazy mom again lol
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Oh, this is so beautiful and innovative! The imagery is amazing and it is very endearing.
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Thank you, Lucy, glad you like it.
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This is so heartfelt, Li, and I love that you shared your process!
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Thank you, Eugi ❤
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My pleasure!
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A missive of love.
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Thank you, Ken.
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I appreciate the process and the result was lovely character sketch of your son. Your proud mother’s heart shines through.
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❤ Thank you, Grace.
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Oh so well written Li.
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Thank you, Sadje.
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Always a pleasure my friend
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Interesting process to write such a loving tribute to your son … guessing he’s a bit embarrassed 🙂 You did well as a parent Lisa to produce one like this!
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Kate, he hasn’t read it yet, but maybe by tomorrow, and yes, he probably will be when he reads it. Who he is is who he has chosen to be. Not to my credit, but thank you for saying it ❤
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has to be 50/50 … you brung him up and without that base he wouldn’t have been empowered to make choices!
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OK OK lol 🙂 ❤
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struggle to accept compliments hmm
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What a great way to bring all this together. Loved your visit with your son… and the great words you used to describe him. Well done.
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Thank you, Dwight. We decided we are going to start making it a regular occurrence, at least until this pandemic gets under control. Both of my sons are good people and for that I am blessed to be their mother.
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You sound like a great Mom!
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I don’t know about that, but I do know I have two great sons. The next stream-of-consciousness one will be about my younger son 🙂
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Wow. Thank you for taking us in your process. The final poem is touching.
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🙂 Thank you very much.
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Beautiful…sometimes writing about a subject so close to heart can be a bit too revealing. I am sure he is delighted but would be a wee bit embarrassed to admit. ❤️
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Yes, exactly, Punam, very difficult. I tried to keep it generic enough but not too vague. Thank you very much.
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You are so welcome.
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love the pictures Lisa
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🙂 Thank you.
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What an interesting process. It’s lovely to meet your son, by the way! I like the fact that you used the stream of consciousness, but then developed it, the end result works really well.
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Thank you, Sarah, glad you had a chance to meet him 🙂
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A spirit traveler…what a wonderful image you have created, full of life and love. (K)
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Yes, Kerfe, he is that. He brightens the world of those around him.
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Pride in your son is very evident in this very clever treatment of the challenge. You’ve featured his attributes well.
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Thank you, Beverly 🙂
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What a lovely tribute to your son …. lucky man to have you as his mother.
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Thank you. Helen, I’m the lucky one.
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Love your method. The resulting poem is lovely.
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Thank you, Imelda.
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I love how you have taken us through your process Lisa. Wonderful results!
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Linda, thanks much!
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How Dear it is For A Mother to Write
A Poem For A Son Even Dearer
For A Son to Find A Poem
For my Mother Wrote Me
Such a Poem on my
33rd Birthday on 6.6.93…
i will Never understand why
She Didn’t Deliver it then but
i guess it was meant to be for i found
that Letter in Her Home After She Passed
Away in 2017.. 8 Days Without Food or
Drink as She Met Her Death Bed
That Year on Valentine’s
Day Beating my Sister
in Scrabble yet
Then Finding
Stage 4 Breast
Cancer Bleeding
Spread to Her Brain
Her wish to go as Naturally
As Possible Doctor Said
Unusually Strong HeART
Usually it only takes 3 Days
to Go That Way Without Water
or Food Under Hospice ‘Natural Care’…
my Mother Started Writing Poetry in Shapes
in Her 50’s as i did.. i could Not Understand It for
Then Work/School for Decades Had taken any Art Away
from my HeART A Western World of Mechanical Cognition
Indeed makes
Avatar
Matrix
And Terminator
Machines out of
all of us if we do not
Put Art in HeART indeed
Free Verse in Poetry for the
Ocean Otherwise Loses the Water
And Waves as Ocean Whole Soul this
Way as Poetry only becomes another Paint
By Number Science Project Free Verse Oldest
Written and Oral Tradition Poetry Escaping Restricted
Neo-Cortex Control indeed the Essence of Tao in the Words
We Bring
From Deep
Within A
Wing on
A Bird
with
No Restraint
There is a Good
Vibration in Your
Poetry Home
Here Sharing
i am currently
Celebrating 7 Years
of Writing Literally the
Longest Epic Long Form
Poem what i name as a Personal
Bible “SonG oF mY SoUL” Anniversary
Date on 8.18.2020.. yes.. 8.4 MiLLioN Words
of Steady Stream of Consciousness Tao
Flow of Poetry this way 100,000 Words
Each Month on Average but of
Course the Ocean
Cares not
Ever For
Copyright
The Shores
Only Spread Free
Where the Waves
Come and Go Always
Free as Waves are Water
And Ocean Whole Free also
Celebrating 13,544 Miles of Public
Free Verse Ballet and Martial Arts
Dance in the Same 7 Years for
indeed at 60 Years-Old as i
will never accept
a Penny
Now for
anything
i’ve done
For the
Sake of Putting
Art Back in HeART
For He is Not enough to Truly Breathe
That way nor is SMarT Without
Art oF EartH Without Art
inheriting
this
Gift
of Ocean
Wave and
Water Free
Giving
And
Sharing
Never
Ends what
Will Love Do
When Love Breathes
What Will Love Bring even more Free
Thanks for reminding me of my Mother’s Poem
Letter True my Celebration would be amiss without
those
Eyes
who
Believed
in a Son
With A Soul True..:)
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Freddy, thank you so much for your waves of free verse. Your mission of the beat of the heART of poetry is wonderful. So glad you remembered your mom’s poem to you. It’s easy to see she thought the world of you. ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤
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Thanks For the inspiration
Of Your Son’s Poem
msjadeli.. Hope all
Remains Happy, Safe,
And Loving For All
You Love With SMiLes😁🎶❣️
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You are very welcome. My pleasure 🙂
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🎶☺️
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Oh, Lisa, I love this so. Thank you for including your process from the very beginning. It gives such depth to a poem which on its own is tender and deep, infused with love. The entire piece is a joy to read.
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Thank you, Victoria glad you enjoyed it.
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Your writing talents never cease to amaze me!
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Thanks much, Irene.
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Lisa,
Thanks for sharing your process. It is always fun to hear how others write. I can relate to this so well, as I am a mother of two sons that I adore. My most recent is one that you might relate to.
Take care and keep shining your light.
Ali
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Thanks much, Ali. I will check it out.
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