#FF — Chosen by a Goddess


photo (c) J Hardy

WARNING: Disturbing content

Chosen by a Goddess

For years I watched them. My faded blue uniform, dingy yellow pail on wheels with filthy water, and heavy mop gave me a front-row ticket to the show.

Every morning and afternoon, they knelt before me, a chorus of chattering goddesses, their firm young bodies, scarcely covered many times. Oblivious to me, a school fixture as unnoticed as a metal wastebasket, I leaned and watched and watched.

Until one noticed me. Our eyes met and her kind face smiled – for me.

I waited each day until she stayed late one winter afternoon.

She was light as an angel’s feather.

[100 words]

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the creative host of Friday Fictioneers.

60 Comments Add yours

  1. Very moving. Great use of 100 words. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, JP.

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  2. Very eerie. Did i detect something sinister here? Good writing.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Neel.

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    The mind of a paedophile is a hard thing to fathiom, but I like the suggestion of social insignificance and powerlessness

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I think you are right, Neil. Combine that with access and opportunity and you’ve got a real problem.

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  4. Gosh Li! You excel again. In just 100 words you created the atmosphere and then that last line. I had goosebumps.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Punam, the moment I looked at the photo the story told itself!

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  5. Oh gosh, very disturbing, and so well written xx

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you. I’ve been reading and watching spooky things and believe it influenced today’s story. Thank you, Bernie.

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  6. Dora says:

    I was reading this as pure fantasy or mythology before it struck me! Frightening tale of innocence taken by a “monster” in the shadows.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dora, yes 😦

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  7. kittysverses says:

    Scary, well narrated, Li. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Kitty!

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  8. Iain Kelly says:

    Disturbing Content sums it up. Quietly horrific.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Iain.

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  9. Fandango says:

    Oh wow, Li, that was a disturbing read. Well crafted and engaging, but disturbing nonetheless.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, very. Thank you, Fandango. It’s why many females are afraid to smile at strangers.

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  10. Oh yuck.
    But real, too.
    I know a child who was molested by someone in a similar ‘invisible’ position in her school. Took another child complaining to have her speak up. Difficult but truth.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, Na’ama 😦

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  11. Dear Lisa,

    “Unnoticed as a metal wastebasket.” Poignant and powerful. I hope the notice at the end was in a good way. It can be taken as either or. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, yes it can. Thank you for your comment.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  12. trentpmcd says:

    A very disturbing story, but very well done. Unfortunately, I think it happens far too often (once is too often…)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Trent, thank you. I agree.

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  13. Danny James says:

    Too close to the truth I’m afraid.

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  14. notestowomen says:

    Disturbing story, very well written.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Magarisa.

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  15. Sadje says:

    It is disturbing alright but very hard hitting message here.

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  16. Sandra says:

    People like this are around us all the time. How can you teach your children enough to keep them safe but not so much they’re in a heightened state of anxiety about everyday interactions. Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, good question, and thank you, Sandra.

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  17. memadtwo says:

    How and why does our world produce such predators? It feels so unnatural to me, yet far too many of them exist. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I wish I knew the answer to that question.

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  18. I’m not sure I want to read what happened next – thank goodness for the word limit.

    Here’s mine!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m not sure I do either, Keith. Thank you for reading and your comment.

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  19. plaridel says:

    like they say, it only takes one to make our day. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I like the idea this could be a perfectly innocent tale.

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  20. granonine says:

    Sinister, indeed. The imagination conjures what you didn’t say.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Linda.

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  21. bearmkwa says:

    Oh, that’s positively sickening… great writing, but… Sends shivers down my spine. My school had a “weird” janitor like that.. almost. He was just WEIRD… don’t think he ever hurt anyone though.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I think with all of the surveillance cameras in schools these days, a weird janitor would have trouble getting away with much, but even the students know the places the cameras don’t reach…

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  22. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    We had a couple of teachers I wondered about…great writing Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you. I think there are a lot of them about.

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      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        I knew some high school teachers who could never get by with the things they pulled today.

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  23. draliman says:

    Disturbing stuff, a predator in the school.

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  24. Am I right in detecting something a little creepy there? Disturbing, but oh so well written Ms. Jadeli.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      You’re detector isn’t wrong. Thank you very much.

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  25. Laurie Bell says:

    Ooooo dark. In my mind he is caught and goes away for life… and he ain’t liking where he’s going.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I like that ending!

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  26. HonieBriggs says:

    You said it; this is disturbing content. And real. And common, as common as a metal wastebasket. You captured the creep with this one.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Honie.

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  27. ahtdoucette says:

    Man that is a Really Disturbing Story but it is well told. That last sentence “light as a feather” just about did me in. I remember playing that game as a kid. I hope this creeper gets caught before it is too late. Ugh.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and your comment, Anne.

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  28. subroto says:

    Disturbing but powerful. Very well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Subroto!

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  29. Nobbinmaug says:

    Without the warning in the beginning, this could almost be read as something innocuous like making a new friend. Instead, it’s subtly horrific. Well written.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your assessment of the story.

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