#FF — Payback


PHOTO PROMPT© Jennifer Pendergast

He’d raped my sister and several other women, but as town judge he was untouchable. I snuggled up to him at Joey’s, his favorite pickup spot, and soon we were parked by the pond. It was easy to rufi him. Once he passed out, I rolled him in. As his secretary, it was easy to use his credit card in the big city so it looked like he disappeared there.

Winter’s freeze made the best accomplice. By the time his body was discovered all evidence would be washed away.

Yet Spring thaw revealed no corpse in the pond.

[100 words]

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the imaginative host of Friday Fictioneers.

 

81 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Vigilante justice. Lucky the freezing water didn’t preserve the body

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading, Neil. I’m sure if his body was in the pond the freezing water would have preserved it….

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  2. Sadje says:

    Hey, that last lines was a puzzler!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      He’s not in the pond, which means she only thinks she drowned him and he survived and is out there, possibly looking for payback.

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      1. Sadje says:

        Oh no! That was not the plan. Maybe someone found the body and disposed off it.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          I’m glad you’re not the detective on the case. You might solve the mystery 😉

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      2. Oh no. I was worried about that possibility!

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  3. Well done, Secretary! That sorted that evil git! Good story!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Mason, thank you! I only wish she had killed him…

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      1. Oh no! So he survived, here comes a cracking stalker story!

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  4. Dale says:

    She didn’t dot all her I’s and cross all her T’s… Now who knows where he is? I’d watch my back were I her!
    Well done, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Dale. She should have dotted and crossed them right, I agree!

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      1. Dale says:

        Ya wanna be sure about these things, after all 😉

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  5. Ain Starlingsson says:

    Superb story. Killer of an ending…so to speak…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Ain!

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  6. athling2001 says:

    Well done. A lot of bodies going in this pond.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      LOL Indeed! Thanks for reading.

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  7. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    That was creative…I was expecting a knife but that was a cool ending. He could still be lurking about.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Max she should have used the knife before rolling him in, I agree 😉

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      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        That would have taken care of him coming back possibly.

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  8. Michael says:

    Has the Rufi has damaged his memory. Will he return, I hope not

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Good question, and I hope not also.

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  9. Danny James says:

    No habeas corpus then.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      No, unfortunately.

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    2. msjadeli says:

      Or should I say yes? No body.

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  10. Great twist in that story, Lisa. Who knows what happened to that jerk. Maybe he viewed the incident as an opportunity to disappear and start over elsewhere again.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Christian. May be!

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  11. draliman says:

    He deserved it, but yeeks! where’s the body…?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m sure she’s wondering the same thing…

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  12. She needs to be looking over her shoulder. A brilliant twist Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Keith!

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  13. Sandra says:

    Now she’s going to be looking over her shoulder for a while… 😦

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  14. GHLearner says:

    Oops. If you have to murder someone, better make sure he’s really dead. Looks like the drug was under-dosed. Great story with a very alarming last line.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      She’ll remember that for next time lol. Thanks much, Gah.

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  15. James McEwan says:

    Mmm, I am not sure who is worse the evil rapist or the revengeful secretary. could she just not put something in his coffee. Serious stuff.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      James I don’t see any contest between a serial rapist without restraint and a person who decides to fight back against one, but that’s just me. Thanks for reading and your thoughtful comment.

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      1. James McEwan says:

        I understand that revenge is justified, its the pre-planned murder element that will get her into trouble, in my view. I would still go for something in the coffee and push him down the stairs.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Ah, I see where you’re coming from. Keep it simple. In hindsight, I’m guessing she is thinking the same thing. Thanks for walking me through it 🙂

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  16. writingwhatnots says:

    Ooh – the tension. Where is the body? Love it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you and glad you enjoyed the story 🙂

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  17. memadtwo says:

    The ambiguous ending is a bit frightening…(K)

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  18. plaridel says:

    he just passed out? it was likely he survived. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      How he could have survived unconsciousness in ice cold water is amazing, but I agree with you!

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  19. RedCat says:

    The opening lines made me nauseous. The murder felt justified. And the last line made my skin crawl. Is he out there seeking revenge and/or new victims?

    You managed to put a lot of story in just one hundred words. Well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helene, thank you. Your wondering if he’s out there hurting others is something I hadn’t considered. Maybe she needs to track him down and take him out, permanently this time.

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  20. Lorraine says:

    Think it’s time she took a road trip. He’s out there, and scary; he might not have his power as protection but he is now an “invisible” man. She might want to consider becoming a full-time vigilant. He’s not the only one like that out there.
    Gave me the shivers. Well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Lorraine and I much enjoyed your comment. I love the Dexter series, but you’re right, there needs to be a female Dexter out and about.

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      1. Lorraine says:

        Yes, just think of what she could accomplish. Am I right that there is/will be a Dexter reboot on one of the streaming channels? My tv isn’t smart enough to stream, so I don’t watch Hulu, Net flix, et al.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Yes. And yes on Dexter reboot:

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          1. Lorraine says:

            I’ll have to tell my friend in case she hasn’t heard. She’s a Dexter aficionado.

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  21. Dear Lisa,

    May she find him before he finds her. He had it coming.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, you’re right, she does. And yes, he did. Thank you for your comment.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  22. elmowrites says:

    Sounds like she needs to watch her back! Love that last line – it makes the story.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Elmo thank you, and thank you for the evocative image. Lots of great stories born from it.

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  23. A tightly told story, very gripping. The woman sounds like a cold blooded organiser.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, appreciate your comment/feedback.

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  24. pennygadd51 says:

    You’ve constructed this story very well, and the conclusion is a killer. It’s a possible scenario, too; there have been very rare instances of prolonged survival in icy water. It could have been several minutes before he was pulled out and revived. Now we wonder where he is – and when the blackmail letters will start.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Penny, thank you. I really hope he does try to blackmail her if he’s still alive. It will show her where he is…

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  25. Nobbinmaug says:

    Obviously, my initial thought was that cannibals found the body and used him as a TV dinner. Everybody knows frozen lakes are freezers for cannibals, but I see from your comments that he survived. Hmm… Now, I’m wondering if he’s hiding from her or hiding to come after her. Who really gets the payback? Duh-duh-duh-duh!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m glad to have sparked all of those possible scenarios in you, Nobbin. Only The Shadow Knows!

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      1. Nobbinmaug says:

        🤣 My grandfather used to say that all the time. He loved those old serials. My mom picked it up from him.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Back in the days before TV…

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  26. jenne49 says:

    Ooh, excellent twist at the end, Lisa!
    I was quite happy that he’d got his comeuppance, and then…
    I’m imagining the continuation.
    Great.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jenne. If the picture is right, you never know, there could be a part 2.

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  27. jenne49 says:

    Aha! To misquote a saying, ‘Where there’ s a picture., there’s a way.’! Waiting with bated breath… 😉

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  28. What a masterful story! The ending was a tad disappointing, though. I was expecting he would have got his due. Your short sentences do the trcik every single time. You have a great writing hand. Always a pleasure reading your wonderful stories.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Neel, thank you very much for your comment, I’m glad you connect with the writing.

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  29. Laurie Bell says:

    Oooooo what happened to the body? Great creep factor here.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks Laurie!

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  30. subroto says:

    Ooh! Nice twist. Either he survived or he made a good meal for an unidentified fishy object.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Subroto, I really hope there were pirahnas in that pond! Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  31. granonine says:

    Uh-oh. Bet she doesn’t sleep well for a very long time, wondering where he is.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I bet you’re right, Linda.

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  32. ahtdoucette says:

    My brain conjured up ominous music at the end there. Great story in such a few words.

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