TSM 182 — Consumed

Consumed

On lonely nights I see you there
when moonlight steals into the room
or candles flicker in the gloom.
When all’s asleep but me and you.

When dawn’s song seems so far away
on sleepless nights, I hear you there,
the creaking board upon the stair;
your scratching in the ceiling tile.

When mist is thick along the ground
and seeps between the window cracks
on chilly nights, I smell you there,
a haunt of rose, a whiff of hell

Your skin so pale! your eyes so dark!
They called you witch, put you to spark.
Your screams yet fill my love lost dreams;
consumed each night, I join you there.

Β 

Today’s offering is a modified quatern.

Hear me read the poem here.

Fireblossom is today’s host of The Sunday Muse.Β 

44 Comments Add yours

  1. fireblossom32 says:

    It’s just love, baby! A very Halloween-ish pair, here indeed.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Shay!

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      1. fireblossom32 says:

        You inspired me to try this form.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Good! πŸ™‚

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  2. Sadje says:

    Very appropriate for this time of the year.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje!

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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        1. Jim says:

          As we, Mrs. Jim and I, have aged we awake more and more in the middle of the night. Often nearly at the same time. My rule, “if being awake lasts more than 30 minutes, get out of bed.” It would be scary for me to be alone in the one you describe, just the two of us. My worst personal fear is being alone with a woman taller than I am. If one comes in from another floor stop I will get off at the next. I feel scared even writing about that.
          ..

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          1. msjadeli says:

            How tall are you?

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  3. Sounds pretty scary. I like it though!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Christian, thank you! It’s difficult to write a non-scary one to an image like that πŸ™‚

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  4. Dora says:

    Ooh! So good and scary, sent chills down my spine. May have to stay up a little longer before I turn out the light!
    pax,
    dora

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    1. msjadeli says:

      πŸ™‚ Tis the season! Sorry to give you chills.

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      1. Dora says:

        When it’s done well, I relish the scares. You did it well, my friend. Great use of the form too. πŸ‘

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  5. Jim says:

    A little eerie love has an imagination. You told it well.
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jim πŸ™‚

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  6. Tis the season, very good stuff

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you πŸ™‚

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  7. wyndolynne says:

    Let’s just say this was completely terrifying at the end. *creeps back to the kitchen for more coffee* Just terrifying.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Wyndolynne, sorry to chill you. More coffee is a good idea πŸ™‚

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  8. Beverly Crawford says:

    Thanks for introducing the quatern. Well done — and worth a shiver!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Beverly. Poor person couldn’t get a break 😦

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  9. Carol anne says:

    you were amazing reading that! I love it! Such a powerful piece of poetry! ❀ xoxo

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Carol anne, thank you πŸ™‚

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  10. hedgewitch says:

    You definitely reflect the mood and spirit in the image. I especially love the “..haunt of rose, whiff of hell..”and the scratching in the ceiling. This time of year the darkness draws in, and our minds have come up with a lot of rituals and religious elements to deal with it, Day of the Dead, All Soul’s Day, and so forth. It’s a part of our psyche. if you don’t speak to it, I think you lose something of what we are as humans and as writers. Loved this one.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Joy, thank you very much for speaking to “the time of the year the darkness draws in.” I think you are so right about finding a way to connect to it to give proper validation to it. Glad you enjoyed this one πŸ™‚

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      1. Carrie V. H. says:

        Such a beautiful and dark love this holds! A gorgeous response to the image Lisa!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Carrie, thank you very much πŸ™‚

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  11. memadtwo says:

    Perfect for October. (K)

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      1. qbit says:

        You and Shay did such a great job with the quatern! It is like a dark stone sinking through the poem, pulling us towards the grave!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Ooh, Q, I love that description! Thank you! I am behind on reading but will be checking Shay’s “dark stone” soon πŸ™‚

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  12. Sherry Marr says:

    Spookily good!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      πŸ™‚ Glad you like it, Sherry!

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  13. writingwhatnots says:

    Love the chilly atmosphere you build up in this – eerily touching all the senses.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Marion, thank you and glad you noticed about the senses πŸ™‚

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  14. Gillena Cox says:

    Spooky one!!!

    MuchπŸ’œlove

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Gillena. Happy Sunday!

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  15. Susie Clevenger says:

    “a haunt of rose, a whiff of hell” Oh, I love that line and the dark, delightful tale that webs around it. Awesome poetry!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Susie, thank you! That’s my favorite line also πŸ™‚

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  16. M says:

    deliciously macabre ~

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