dVerse — Prosery — The magic of rain

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I wandered lonely as a cloud.
–by William Wordsworth,
from his eponymous poem

Seeing a cumulus puff amongst cirrocumulus sheets made the mountain dragon laugh.

You’re an anachronism!”

Try as I might to slough off the words, his throaty grumbles clung like heavy ice crystals. They turned my cushiony cotton into spiked crackles which shredded sensitivity. I shrank into a crevasse.

One day a stray sunbeam landed and whispered,

Dragons come and go at their whim. So can you.”

I wandered lonely as a cloud, drifting down from the peaks, seeking warm green.

The scent of humus was in the air, and I felt lighter. I looked down and realized I was raining on a gurgling creek being hugged by moss banks and dancing birch leaves. Mallards circled and ruffled in the water under me, quacking in good cheer.

Giggles grew louder as breeze blew other powder puffs near.
Welcome! We’re glad you’re here!”

[144 words]

Notes from SciJinks about clouds:
(high) Cirrocumulus clouds are thin, sometimes patchy, sheet-like clouds. They sometimes look like they’re full of ripples or are made of small grains. Weather prediction: Fair, but cold. However, if you live in a tropical region, these clouds could be a sign of an approaching hurricane!
(low) Cumulus clouds look like fluffy, white cotton balls in the sky. They are beautiful in sunsets, and their varying sizes and shapes can make them fun to observe!
Weather prediction: Fair

Also, I’m 99% sure that the last 2 lines of my poem are from a children’s book, “On the Day You Were Born,” by Debra Frasier, one of my favorite children’s books.

top image:  “Magic Hour No. 2” by Stev’nn Hall

Lillian is today’s host for dVerse’ Prosery Monday. Lillian says:
The line I want you to include in your prose/flash fiction piece of 144 words or less, sans title, is “I wandered lonely as a cloud”. Remember, you must use the line, word for word.

48 Comments Add yours

  1. lillian says:

    Loving this magical tale!
    Such beautiful description throughout….I am particularly smitten with ” a gurgling creek being hugged by moss banks and dancing birch leaves.”

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Lillian 🙂

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  2. Great story. You really pulled me in. I’m thinking this would make for a really good fantasy story. Depending on where it went it could be for kids or adults. I only say kids because I don’t read fantasy stuff so I never imagine that adults do. Lol. Narrow mind….

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Christine, thank you very much ❤

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  3. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    Light-hearted morality tale, a children’s storybook for sure. THE LONELY LITTLE CLOUD. Illustrated by Dr. Seuss.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glenn, thanks! I could see that!

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  4. writingwhatnots says:

    What a magical story Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Marion ❤

      Liked by 1 person

  5. Sadje says:

    This is beautiful Li. Love the story of the clouds.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sadje, thank you. I’m partial to clouds and their stories 🙂

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome my friend

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  6. K.Hartless says:

    Rebirth is so essential. Poetic and powerful, as I’ve come to expect. Thanks, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      K, thank you so much.

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      1. K.Hartless says:

        You’re very welcome.

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  7. Gillena Cox says:

    “Mallards circled and ruffled in the water under me, quacking in good cheer.”
    My favourite lines of your story..
    Pardon me if i read a little of the Ugly Duckling in your gorgeously told tale

    Much💜love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Gillena thank you very much. I agree, be they ducklings or clouds, a tough time for a bit but in the end happy outcome ❤

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  8. An excellent write Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Carol 🙂

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  9. An enchanting use of the prompt. Bravo!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Susan, thank you!

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  10. This is a lovely tale. It would be a nice story for a children’s book.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Ken.

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  11. Anonymous says:

    An absolutely captivating piece. I especially loved the imagery of ” throaty grumbles clung like heavy ice crystals” and “I was raining on a gurgling creek being hugged by moss banks and dancing birch leaves.” Besides the idea of a children’s story, I also saw it as an imaginative escape from the chaos of the world to a peaceful haven.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      “Someone” I like what you’re seeing here. Thanks much ❤

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  12. What a delight to find dragons and talking clouds! Though the dragon was unkind, this unfolded happily ever after with a vindicated cloud finding their place and appreciation. Nice.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      D, thank you very much.

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  13. memadtwo says:

    I like the way the story progressed–great ending. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kerfe, thank you.

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  14. Truedessa says:

    A wonderful tale with a message. I think Eric Carle wrote a children’s book about a cloud as well.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Truedessa. I like Eric Carle’s work. IIRC he’s also a collage artist. There’s also “Cloudy with a Chance of Meatballs” that I read to my kids when they were little.

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  15. kaykuala says:

    I wandered lonely as a cloud,
    drifting down from the peaks,
    seeking warm green.

    I could feel lots of movements in your write, Jade! It makes it very much alive.

    Hank

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Hank, thank you.

      Like

  16. Delightfully magical, Li! Love it. 💖

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Punam, thank you ❤

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      1. My pleasure. 🙂

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  17. ooooh…. a fantasy piece – this is great, Lisa!


    David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, David ❤

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  18. Nice poem, Lisa. As I was reading it and looking at the photo, I had the clip of the rainy day duck pond run in the background – I find water sounds very relaxing. After a while I thought, ‘gee, these 3 minutes are really long’ – then, I realized it’s actually 3 hours. I hope the camera that captured the footage was placed on a stand, not being held by a cameraman or camerawoman! 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks a lot, Christian. You’re right the sound of rain and gurgling water is extremely relaxing.

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  19. Dale says:

    I love this, Lisa. You chose the perfect image to go with!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dale thank you. It took me awhile to find it.

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      1. Dale says:

        Worth your effort!

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  20. Anita says:

    Thank you for sharing very magical story dear.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      You’re welcome, Anita.

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  21. Badfinger (Max) says:

    That one flows really well Lisa. “Giggles grew louder as breeze blew other powder puffs near” that is good imagination.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Max, thank you 🙂

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  22. This is incredible! A beautiful piece💖💫

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you 🙂

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