dVerse — Poetics — each thing falls away

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#anders zorn from songesoleil

at first I refused to believe
overboard, swept out in the storm;
wee dawn, on the beach, inert form

i wailed in the throes of my grief
your unwilling, early depart
at whim of a god with no heart

i vowed in exchange for relief
if God roll back Time’s Tide and take moi
instead, but God dug in, said, “Nah.”

I, assailed, dashed now on the reef,
dead soul walks alone on the sand
tears fall to the sea in remand

each thing falls away like a leaf
with season of now on the wind
my dear love to his care consigned

Today’s offering is in Constanza form, created by Connie Marcum Wong

Top image by Anders Zorn.

I am today’s host for dVerse’ Poetics.  I say:
Today’s challenge, should you choose to accept it, is to choose one or more of Kubler-Ross’ stages of grief (denial, anger, bargaining, depression, and acceptance) to write about, in relation to your, or another’s, current state of being. Or maybe you aren’t in any of these stages at all. Write about that. There will be few restrictions on the writing challenge today.

38 Comments Add yours

  1. johncoyote says:

    Powerful and worthwhile words shared. I liked this poem.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, John.

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      1. johncoyote says:

        You are welcome dear Poet.

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    2. Reena Saxena says:

      Each thing falls away like a leaf
      With Season of now on the wind.

      This is what I liked best.

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      1. msjadeli says:

        Reena, thank you very much ❤

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  2. That must be so very hard to do

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, Larry.

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  3. Gillena Cox says:

    Ah what a lament. This one touched my heart.
    Have a blessed Tuesday

    much💛love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Gillena ❤

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  4. calmkate says:

    a soulful lament that will surely resonate with most of us!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you so much, Kate, I think you’re right.

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  5. marialberg says:

    Nice use of an interesting form for this prompt.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Marial.

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  6. Sadje says:

    Beautifully expressed Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sadje, thank you ❤

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      1. Sadje says:

        My pleasure

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  7. I can see that, very much, by the sea, the waves roaring in, your words, too…in fact the way J feel made this a tough read…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ain, you are immersed in waves of intensity right now, in the middle of historic tragedy. My wish for you is to try to find a bit of peace in the middle of it. One thing I have always appreciated about hospitals here is that they have a small chapel with brightly colored glass in them. I go there and lose myself in the glass.

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  8. memadtwo says:

    I think we all wonder at the fate that leaves us living when those we love die. (K)

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  9. rothpoetry says:

    A very intense poem of grief and loss! So many mixed feelings throughout!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dwight. I used each of the 5 stages to begin each stanza.

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        Very well done, Lisa!

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  10. the each leaf line has such a feeling of abandon and acceptance. really emotive piece, Lisa. thank you for this prompt!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rosemarie, thank you so much, and you are very welcome.

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  11. Love how this intense lament moved through each stage to finally arrive at acceptance. The form worked very well, Li. ❤️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Punam, thank you. Right now I’m at the skimming stage and I agree that form worked well for it ❤

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  12. I had not heard of a Constanza form before. Love how you use this structure to take the grieving widow one stage at a time.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Marion, it’s my first time using that form and I think it worked well for the subject. Thank you very much ❤

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      1. It’s so satisfying when a new form works out well and suits our words.

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  13. danadampier says:

    Beautiful!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dana, thank you.

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  14. I love: each things falls away like a leaf– bringing in the season of dying

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Sascha.

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  15. Helen says:

    Your poem is beautifully composed … I could feel its (e)motion, like undulating waves of the stages.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen thank you very much. I’m pleased you connected with it ❤

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  16. s.s. says:

    With season of now on the wind… beautiful 😍

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sangeetha, thank you 🙂

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      1. s.s. says:

        You write beautifully ☺️

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