last lines for 2022 poems

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painting by Mary Sonya Conti

nature’s teaching brings illumination of sun;
bluff that satisfies the sequoia.
each thing falls away like a leaf
and tunes into each moment’s song.
cold shadows fade; promised hearth warms us.
elbow to elbow, we verse ourselves and fly
and wave. another babe on your arm
as you inhale your garden,
reciprocal determiners
act of comforting
remains. her final farewell —
doom’s dissonant stay.

I couldn’t resist taking the last lines of those same poems and trying to find another found poem. I’m not linking this one to dVerse because I changed not only some of the tenses but some of the punctuation and capitalization. I will put the link into the first lines poem however.

Links to the poems:
Alchemical
Nibbling
Spirits Promise
Final Farewell
each thing falls away
celebrating the 11th anniversary of dVerse
The Big Bluff (2nd one from July because none written in June)
The First Time
choice
gone but not gone
(white mask) (tanka with no title)
Winter Light

20 Comments Add yours

  1. Loved these lines: “elbow to elbow, we verse ourselves and fly” I like how there is so much movement from one cycle to another in this, feels like a divine evolution! 💝

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Tricia, I think this one flows much better than the first lines one. I like your descriptor of it, thank you!

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  2. memadtwo says:

    This has a very circular feel to it.
    “elbow to elbow, we verse ourselves and fly”–that line alone could spawn several poems. An idea for a future prompt…(K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kerfe. I thought it was circular also.

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  3. Sadje says:

    It works very well Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you so much, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        Always a pleasure

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  4. Suzanne says:

    This works really well. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Suzanne 🙂

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  5. Really impressive how you put this poem together. I also like the Jethro Tull song you picked. In videos I’ve seen of him, Ian Anderson oftentimes looks like he’s slightly possessed or something! 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Christian. I think that goofiness is just him being theatrical. I’m glad he played it straight for this one.

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  6. That is the most interesting painting of the sun that I’ve ever seen. 😍🤩

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I love it also. Really gives the sun some character.

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      1. Exactly right. Thanks for sharing. ❤️

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  7. I might try this. I passed on the original prompt. With one or two-word lines from haiku and very long lines opening a prose poem and a haibun, the prompt was just too much.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I hope you do.

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  8. Badfinger (Max) says:

    Those are some great lines Lisa…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Happy you think so, Max. Thank you ❤

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