dVerse Poetics — Gotham: The First Domino

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Gotham:  The First Domino

Ship cast asea, its belly full
Coal gone, no more steam
Itched and brittle with scurvy
Noxious fog, lost instruments
Sails hoisted, yet no wind
Mates and passengers alike
On our knees, we cough and pray,
Facing mid-Atlantic gruesome end,
To end albatross, millstone 'round
Our sickly necks; orange, stenched
Corpse, raucous croak of certain death,
It rots above us in the crow's nest.

Then comes distant thunder rumbles; 
Far Gotham of East (West.) Its temple 
Raised with many hands, Hope in its 
Domino-shaped stele; its lightning 
Alchemizes foul fog to fair clouds,
Forms water spouts carrying fish,
Fruit, and fresh water to famished.
Screeching zombie gull lifted up,
Away, downward, beneath waves,
Silent now. A-move with gales & cheers,
Our bellies and hearts full, resolute:
Land, embark, build more dominos.

I am today’s host for dVerse’ Tuesday Poetics. The prompt is to write a poem using weather.

36 Comments Add yours

  1. There is nothing worse at sea than no wind… love the way they were saved by that storm… (talk about being dependent on weather)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Indeed, out of coal and out of wind is a bad situation at sea. I’m glad prayers were answered.

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  2. Aptivi's avatar Aptivi says:

    A wonderful piece. Also, I really enjoyed watching the video; I like how the dominoes fell from the start to the end 👍

    Thank you so much for sharing this awesomeness, Lisa! That made me smile ☺️

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Aptivi, thank you very much and glad you enjoyed it :)

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      1. Aptivi's avatar Aptivi says:

        You’re most welcome, Lisa ☺️

        I hope you’re having a wonderful day today.

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  3. Love this. Very nautical. I’m posting something on a similar topic tomorrow

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks, Steve! Will be looking for yours tomorrow.

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      1. My mistake. Not tomorrow. The next day

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  4. Maggie's avatar Maggie says:

    A lovely poem Lisa ❤️

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Maggie, thank you very much.

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  5. Such a beautiful poem, Li. Love the video❣️

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Cindy, thanks very much. I love that video also!

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  6. Gillena Cox's avatar Gillena Cox says:

    Nice one, Lisa

    much love

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks, Gillena <3

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  7. Being caught in the doldrums, to be saved by a storm. What a frightening idea, sailing across mountainous seas. I truly admire the grit and bravery of sailors. Stunning poetry. so vivid.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Freya, thank you for reading and your thoughtful comment.

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  8. Carol anne's avatar Carol anne says:

    a fntastic write Li 🦋🦋🤗🤗🎈🎈🤗🤗🦋🦋

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thank you very much, CA <3

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  9. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:

    An interesting poem, Lisa. I believe I detect a nod to the Rhyme of the Ancient Mariner. The dominos are amzing.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks very much, Dwight. I love the dominos also. Seems like it would have taken her longer to set them up. I sure it trains one to be focused.

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      1. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:

        Yes, very much so! You are welcome.

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  10. Paula Light's avatar Paula Light says:

    Wow, intense! Love the old-timey language…

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Paula, many thanks glad you liked it :)

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  11. Truedessa's avatar Truedessa says:

    I always enjoy a good poem about the sea and this was epic.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Truedessa, I’m happy it pleased you, thank you <3

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  12. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta says:

    An inventive piece Lisa merging gothic sea horror with surrealist myth-making – fabulous- I love the nod to the Ancient Mariner 🙌

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Ange, thanks so much for reading and your feedback.

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      1. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta says:

        You are very welcome 💕

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  13. Sadje's avatar Sadje says:

    Lovely poem Li. And loved the dominos display.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks, Sadje. So did I :)

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      1. Sadje's avatar Sadje says:

        You’re welcome ☺️

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  14. Vaccinius's avatar Vaccinius says:

    Drifting by wind and weather is an expression, in Norwegian. Not the thing to do. One must weather the storm, is my thought, reading your poem. You make an interesting vision of fatalism. And the question is if mankind nowadays is in a fatalistic state, longing for a saviour. Thank you.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Vaccinius, thank you for your thoughtful and insightful comment. I see NYC’s Mayor Mamdani as the first domino. In Michigan and in other congressional primary races across the US, progressive democrats are winning, refusing to take corporate and other PAC $$. This may be the biggest November election to date.

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  15. merrildsmith's avatar merrildsmith says:

    I can’t imagine what those sea voyages across an ocean were like (and before coal and steam). I like how they are saved instead of destroyed by the storm.

    My grandfather once told me that that the ship he was on to emigrate to the US was stuck in the harbor for days because of bad weather, but I don’t know the details.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Merril, Margaret Atwood describes a sea voyage across the Atlantic so vividly in her book, “Alias Grace.” I’m glad your grandfather made it across OK.

      I’m glad “they” (i.e. we) are saved instead of destroyed by the storm.

      Thanks much for your comment.

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      1. merrildsmith's avatar merrildsmith says:

        You’re very welcome, Li!

        I remember really enjoying Alias Grace, but I read it when it first came out about 30 years ago(?), and I don’t remember the sea voyage or how she described it.

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