Ev’ry night ascend appointed path
Rendezvous until the dark is gone
Tuck away immortal flights with you
Come the sober rose blush of the dawn
Doesn’t matter that it isn’t real
Even if it’s just in dreams it’s true
Come the sober rose blush of the dawn
Tuck away immortal flights with you
Promise hugged with hope one day unfurled
When the time of parting is undrawn
No more tucked immortal flights will do
Come the sober rose blush of the dawn
Soaring daylight living warmth entwined
Ghosts maintained released, no more to do
Come the loving rose blush of the dawn
Manifest immortal flights with you
image: “A Pair of Lovers,” by Vincent Van Gogh
Grace is today’s host for dVerse’ Meet the Bar/Poetry Form. Grace says:
Write a poem in the Mirrored Refrain form.
Tao Talk 
This has a mystical fantasy imagery and world. I admire the refraining lines which makes me want to fly away:
Tuck away immortal flights with you
Come the sober rose blush of the dawn
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Thank you, Grace :)
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Oh you have succeeded so beautifully, Lisa.
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Thanks, Dale!
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:)
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The refrain is absolutely swoon-worthy Lisa! Beautiful work done 💝💝
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Thanks much, Sanaa :) <3
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Oh, this is very beautiful!
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Thanks, Lucy :)
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I like this! Especially the second stanza.
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Thank you, Jane!
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…come the sober rose rush of the dawn….what an absolutely beautiful line!
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Lillian, thank you <3
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“ Doesn’t matter that it isn’t real even if it’s just in dreams we’re true” ~ swoon-worthy, Lisa. ( don’t laugh but at first glance I read immortal as immoral )❤️
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That works too, Helen ;)
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So beautiful, the sounds and imagery do transcend this reality! ✨💗✨
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Tricia, thank you. I want to tweak it some but I hope the message came through.
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I was thinking one spouse died early and the other met up with him/her in dreams, but after death they will be together forever. I’m curious if I’ve got it right?
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Once the poem is released, it is in the hands of the reader. If that’s what you see, then yes :)
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So true! I’m okay with my poetry being subjective, but my short stories people must get, haha!
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:)
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Fantastic poem Li.
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Thank you, my friend.
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Always a pleasure
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Love your clever way Jade, of making the refrain a little different from its previous one as you go down the line. It will not make it monotonous.
Hank may have to adjust his poem to follow suit. Thanks, Ma’am for showing the way to be more innovative!
Hank.
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Hank, whatever I’ve learned about poetry has come from the wonderful poets at dVerse. Thank you for your kind words.
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Beautifully crafted. A creative twist on the form.
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Truedessa, many thanks, glad you like it.
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Such a lovely phrase, “Come the sober rose blush of the dawn” not least because it’s somewhat awkward to say, like trying to remember a dream.
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:) <3 Thank you for sharing what you see.
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Oooooooooh. Love the magical and soft ambiance that rolls throughout the poem, Ms. Lisa. Your repeating lines are so creative and beautiful.
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Ms. Rosemarie, I’m so glad you enjoyed the poem, thank you.
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you’re welcome, Ms. Lisa!
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You did a great job on this prompt Lisa!
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Thanks, Dwight!
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:>)
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I love the mystery of this.
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You took us to a beautiful place. I wonder why dawn is so sobering?
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Thank you, Christine. I see it here as an acknowledgement that reality is coming with it :(
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p.s. Thank you. Your comment inspired me to change the last repeat of that phrase <3
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Oh Lisa I thought it was such a brilliant line and it made me realize it is indeed sobering. It always brings a fresh perspective when it comes. You write do beautifully ☺️🌺💕
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Christine thank you. Your comment is appreciated <3 :)
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It was beautiful either way Lisa ☺️🌺💕
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Thank you, Ken.
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Great line Lisa… “Come the sober rose blush of the dawn”
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Max, thank you.
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Love how you subtly changed the refrain gradually. Beautiful, Li. ❤️
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Punam, thank you <3
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My pleasure. 😊
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Great job on the prompt Lisa❣️❣️👏
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Thank you, Cindy :)
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Pleasure Lisa💖
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To me this has a feel of an older, unrushed time. (Does that make sense?) Your mirror refrain is quite beautiful, yet sad.
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I’m glad it evokes those feelings. It’s meant to feel timeless. Thank you, Marion.
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you took us right into the painting, subtle and mysterious … great writing!
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Kate, thank you! I loved that painting the moment I saw it.
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yes and it radiates throughout your poem Lisa, kudos!
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Excellent refrain, Lisa!
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Thank you, Sara.
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