dVerse — Poetics — choice with update on 9/8/22 on Pinocchio origins

pleasure island

Is health dread chore as stone to bear,
where taste sums not but sweat adds up?
Foul apps clang fail; reminder’s swear.
Is health dread chore as stone to bear
as friends die young, diseased, with flair?
One’s life line grows. Gray’s bitter cup.
Is health dread chore as stone to bear,
where taste sums not but sweat adds up?

Is free a place where no is myth,
where rope enough can’t tie you up;
a sinful soup and that is this?
Is free a place where no is myth,
a carousel with ever bliss;
flipped coin that always lands with luck?
Is free a place where no is myth,
where rope enough can’t tie you up?

Perhaps its best to channel surf
and tune into each moment’s song;
to taste the air, to scuff the earth.
Perhaps its best to channel surf;
to choose adventures e’er diverse;
to not get gummed with right and wrong.
Perhaps its best to channel surf
and tune into each moment’s song.

Triolet form.
Image of paint-by-number Pleasure Island from Disney movie, Pinocchio

Update on 090822:

Also please note that Pinocchio, the classic children’s tale, was first created in Carlo Collodi’s 1883 Italian book “The Adventures of Pinocchio”.

https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/thumb/6/65/Pinocchio.jpg/174px-Pinocchio.jpg
illustration from 1883 edition by Enrico Mazzanti

Christopher is today’s host for dVerse’ Poetics.  Christopher says:
And so fellow word wrestlers, you have the choice to craft a poem in any style, form, meter, syntax, rhyme scheme, line length, or formatting – having to do with the concept of choice.

36 Comments Add yours

  1. Jim says:

    Yes, the choice is yours, the doctor’s advice or the alternative.
    That’s no choice, like the rest of them, doctors win.
    “To taste the air …”
    but there I have no choice, COVID got my taste and smell.
    A fun read, Lisa. My handicaps are small compared with some others.
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your lively comment, Jim. 🙂

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  2. Wow! What a terrific write! [Applause!]

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Carol 🙂

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  3. memadtwo says:

    Too many bad choices…(sigh) (k)

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  4. rothpoetry says:

    Very nicely done, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Dwight 🙂

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  5. rothpoetry says:

    Love the illustration that takes me back to childhood!

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    1. Wow Lisa! I love the questions you pose and then toss them aside as if none of them matter. Brilliant writing!

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      1. msjadeli says:

        Mary, many thanks ❤

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    2. msjadeli says:

      Me too! It’s been so many years since seeing that movie. Jiminy Cricket has always been one of my favorite Disney characters.

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        I had the illustrated comic book of it. :>)

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Awwwwwwwww 🙂

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  6. Grace says:

    I so enjoyed the verses in the trilot form. The second part gives me pause to ponder about the myth of freedom. The third one is a hopeful note with : tune into each moment’s song. Refraining lines work well with this form.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Grace, thank you for the feedback and so happy you enjoyed the verses.

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  7. Sadje says:

    We make the choices and the decisions; The results are never in our hands.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I think you’re right, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        Thanks 🙏🏼

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  8. This is terrific! My favorite line is – Is free a place where no is myth, where rope enough can’t tie you up; a sinful soup and that is this? – a lot is said in these few words, very cool.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Chris, I’m pleased that you’re pleased. I enjoyed writing this one very much. Thank you.

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  9. Rob Kistner says:

    Really like the third verse Lisa. I feel as though I live life channel surfing… but I like the variety it affords — my friend… 🙂✌🏼❤️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you connect to it, Rob. I like to stay in the middle ground between the first and second verse but often end up in the extremes so head to the third 🙂

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  10. dorahak says:

    “To tune into each moment’s song” – lovely! Lisa, Your poem reads like a carousel with chiming choices, spinning into one clear desire. Beautifully crafted.
    ~Dora

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dora, thanks very much, love your comment.

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  11. Bill says:

    Nicely done, Lisa. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Bill 🙂

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  12. The myth of freedom is so real… love how you combine it with the Pinochio illustrations.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Bjorn!

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  13. seanatbogie says:

    Very insightful and well put together Lisa. So many things influence our capacity to make good choices – age being a significant one. Sometimes I just want to stick my head in the sand, but of course there is so much good to live for as well. It is easy to be overwhelmed and you need to make a conscious effort to keep perspective on who you are, your place at any given time and where you are really at with that.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you and well-said, Sean.

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  14. This is wonderfully crafted, Li!
    So glad you reposted it, I had missed reading it earlier.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Punam 🙂

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      1. You are welcome. 🙂

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  15. Badfinger (Max) says:

    I love the illustration… I like the line Perhaps its best to channel surf
    and tune into each moment’s song

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Max, thank you.

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